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PostSubject: Island of the Siren   Mon Jun 16, 2014 2:12 pm

well this is based on the post left in the request ideas im not good at coming up with ideas so i would like suggestions between each post if someone will tell me what they would like to see in this i would start then! Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Mon Jun 16, 2014 2:51 pm

I like the title of this for now. It sounds a little menacing. So I was thinking that the group of teens (probably at least 16, though if they were around 18-21, then you could work in some more situations since they're "adults", but it's up to you). They should either be on a cruise ship together for a week vacation and an "accident" happening to crash the ship and they swim to shore, or that they get their own sailboat to go camping on this certain island and in the process their boat breaks and sinks. The island could have a large jungle in the center, sandy beaches surrounding the jungle, and perhaps an oasis at the center of the jungle(and the oasis can go deeper and lead to an underwater cave/lair). I'll think of some more later. If you use the cruise ship idea, this girl Sofia can be on it with them and they can meet before or after it crashes. I'll think of some more ideas for you Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Mon Jun 16, 2014 6:10 pm

Im going to use a private ship considering the fact a cruise ship would have too many people to deal with but i do like the jungle idea.Im also going to change name to keep it more mysterious o-o

"VACATION ALL I EVER WANTED!!!!!!!!" Screamed Alex. "Shut up, will ya?" His Older brother Carlos complained. "Im on vacation, and getting away from your annoying yelling and dumb quotes are part of that!" Alex just laughed "Love you, too bro!" Carlos rolled his eyes. "At it already guys? Come on let's have some fun!" yelled Lexi. "If this is you three's definition of fun i want no part in it. I want some quiet to lay back and be lazy!" "Your loss" said Carlos "but guys was that storm always going on?" "I don't think so? Should we really being doing this now? Let's turn back..." "Nonsense! Onward! Besides Lexi if your scared you can always hold on to me! Alex shouted "You wish!" Lexi replied blushing. "Guys that pretty damn close!" Jack screamed as lightning landed right next to the ship
"I guess we gotta turn ba....." CRASH!!! The lightning crashed into the ship.


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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Mon Jun 16, 2014 6:58 pm

Interesting start off. Only thing is that since Alex and Alexis are so similar, it was a little confusing for me. Maybe if she had a nickname like Lexi or something to dissociate herself from Alex it'd be fine. You could also have them pass out on the island or swim during the storm to it. Nice work so far though and I'm looking forward to more!
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Tue Jun 17, 2014 7:04 am

(changed name to lexi in last post thanks)
Carlos opened his eyes. "Huh? Where the hell am i? He looked around appears we crashed or something"
The ship was upside down but didn't seem to move. "We sure as heck ain't still at sea but where are we?" Then it came to him. "Shit where is everyone!!!" He opened the door to his cabin and saw the ship ripped in two. "Great! As if finding them wasn't going to be hard enough! GUYS YOU THERE!" He waited for a response. "NO!" He heard someone yell. "Alex? For once Im glad to hear your voice! Where are you? Is anyone with you?" "We are all here. Come over to the land!" screamed Lexi " Carlos got off the ship only to see the island they ironically came here for."
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Tue Jun 17, 2014 11:18 am

how was that
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Tue Jun 17, 2014 11:37 am

It was fine. If I don't respond then I probably don't have much to say. I'm still reading it don't worry. Just keep going. The only thing I can say is to make sure to be as descriptive as possible with everything: things characters do, what the environment looks like, and so on, not to try to sound fancy or whatever, but to paint the reader an image. The easier it is for the reader to picture everything in their head without filling in their own details, the better. Just a general note for all writing. I do like the premise though and it should get more interesting as it goes on. Most importantly, have fun with it!
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Tue Jun 17, 2014 6:44 pm

"What now?" Jack asked. "We are shipwrecked...lost..hungry...and have no contact to home..." "Calm down, Big Bro 'll think of something right?" Alex said optimistically "Yeah, Carlos is the smartest one here he'll think know what to do besides..." Lexi continued "You're probably the only hungry person here!" she added on annoyed "Alright I got it!" Carlos shouted getting everyone's attention "We told our folks we'd be coming this way so....It's Monday right?....By Friday we will have someone looking for us! As for food i suggest we go in teams of two to find food. I'll go with Jack! Lexi you go with AiAi!" "LET'S GO!" Alex screamed! "Ugh.." Lexi thought "Why him?" "Anyways guys, we will both go into the forest behind us and go look for some food! Be back by the time the sun goes down!" "Will do!" Lexi said with a smirk on her face.
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Wed Jun 18, 2014 4:10 pm

Ooh, they're splitting up already? Can't wait to read what happens next :p
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Wed Jun 18, 2014 8:03 pm

While looking for some food Alex and Lexi stumbled upon a body. Confused Alex poked it with a stick. "Hey, are you dead!" He asked poking at the body they just found. Lexi hit Alex on the head "Dead or not thats disrespectful!" She said yelling. "Ow yeah i get it!" Alex grunted recovering from his injury.
The girl then opened her eyes and got to her feet. She was wearing a white gown and had long brown hair, green eyes, and a blueish tint to her skin. She also looked no older than them "Can you speak?" Lexi asked staring at her. The girl shook her head. "Yes, hello." she said shyly "My name is Eleanor and I've been on this island as long as i can remember." "Well my names Alex and i think you're h..." Lexi stomped on Alex's foot. "Lost...hehe my friend was about to say Lost." Anyways the rest of my friends are getting food maybe you can join us. "If I won't be a burden to you all." Eleanor said. Lexi lead the 3 back to the camp. "My new victims. They don't seem to hard prey. Besides, I'm getting a bit lonely on this island. Maybe Another siren will be just what i need." Eleanor thought as they walked back to the beach.
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Wed Jun 18, 2014 8:18 pm

Not sure if you noticed or not,  but this entry is definitely the best so far. The other ones mainly contained dialouge, which for all intents and purposes is fine,  but I loved the detail here to describe Eleanor and what Alex and Lexi was doing. It was funny too; I loved the parts where he poked her with a stick and was going to just bluntly say she was hot. Though your other entries are fine, I would love to see you continue doing things as you did in this last entry,  making it easy for me to follow,  giving enough description for me to visualize it, and even throw in some humor. Keep up the good work! Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Thu Jun 19, 2014 8:16 pm

The group met up at sundown with their new member. "Well it appears you've been busy." Carlos retorted sarcastically looking at the little peaches and apples Lexi and Alex had with them. "Yes, we have been." Lexi said ignoring the sarcasm in his voice. "Look!" Jack crossed his arms. "...At the absolute nothingness in your hands?" "Get your head out your ass and wait a sec!" Alex butt in. As the two went to exchange punches Carlos jumped in. "Calm down jackasses. Now what is it we are looking at?" "Her!" Lexi said stepping out the way to reveal Eleanor to. "Hi." Eleanor said meekly. "We found her just lying in the forest." Lexi added "She seems to be very shy. Her name is Eleanor" "Well Hello Eleanor" Jack said before whispering to Carlos "I call dibs!" "We're alone abandoned on an island and all you can think about is hitting on a shy chick we just met?" Carlos whispered back "Hey don't judge me! Besides, I don't think we want Lexi knowing our little secret." Jack snickered "Fuck you too." Carlos said quietly backing away. "We'll we're about to eat.....something for the night." Carlos calmly said over to Eleanor. "While we eat maybe you can tell us about yourself." "Oh...ok" She said making her way out from behind Lexi and Alex. "In the meantime..." Carlos continued. "Let's set up camp!"
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Fri Jul 04, 2014 6:25 pm

Oh Wow I forgot about this hehe? Is anybody actually still Interested in me continuing?
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Fri Jul 04, 2014 6:52 pm

Yeah! I was actually waiting this whole time for a continuation. You can't just stop before the good parts lol. Plus you're developing your writing, which is a great thing.
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Fri Jul 04, 2014 9:06 pm

(Thanks Ill just say that im "younger than expected for the forum" so i was originally afraid my entries wouldn't be enjoyed)

After setting up camp the group started eating their dinner. "Delicious!" Jack happily stated chomping into his peach. "This Island can't be that bad!" he chuckled finishing up his peach and wiping off the sweet juice on his shirt. "Not bad? You call being stranded on this island not bad? This is terrible." Lexi complained. She got up and started pacing back and forth thinking "What do we do?" Over and over. Carlos got up and went to calm her down. While they were gone Alex and Jack started to talk to Eleanor. "Funny question, Why does your skin have a blue tint?" Alex asked laughing and scratching his head nervously. Eleanor heard that and jumped back nervously "W-w-what do u mean?" "The only time i ever heard of a blue tint to skin is when the person is born a Siren." Eleanor kept slowly crawling backwards "Does he know?" Eleanor said shaking "Just kidding, no one actually believes that crap its just a story" He got up and started laughing "That was way too close..." she thought "I guess I could take them all on but its not even close to as much fun. This kid could prove useful as there maybe things even i don't know about myself." "Do you mind telling me more about this Sirens?" She asked politely "Yeah Alex tell her more about the sirens!" Jack added on with a smug look on his face. "All I really know is that they seduce males to death and they some how can turn females into sirens themselves." Alex replied to them. He tried to fake a happy tone of voice for Eleanor but ends up giving Jack a dead stare. "I can turn others?" She pondered "This will be fun and I have the perfect guinea pigs!" Jack yawned loudly and interrupted the conversation. "I'm tired. We should all go to bed!" "What if I don't wanna , huh!?!?!" Alex yelled at Jack. "Go to bed." Carlos told his brother. He and Lexi were walking back from where they went. "That goes for everyone we got alot of work to do tomorrow. "I'll say." Eleanor. "Well I'm sleeping in the ship-wreck cause I like to live dangerously!" Jack stated trying to act cool. "Whatever lazy ass. Well good night everyone!" Alex said annoyed beyond all hope.

(Also i will need help for the next part i need more of a Move list then what i had in mind so do u mind coming up with some for me too?)
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Mon Jul 07, 2014 9:20 am

(When you finish reading this tell me what you think of it...and if u have any ideas of what to do next they would be appreciated. Of course if you don't have any that's fine as well but at the very least i would like to know how I'm doing.)

After Jack left to the ship, the rest of the group laying in their sleeping bags conversing about rescue. "Do you really think we will get saved?" Lexi asked concerned "Of course!" Carlos reassured fist-bumping her. "Even so this island isn't too bad, I wouldn't mind staying here!" Alex added on to that laughing on and on. All of a sudden the three heard an angelic voice singing. Alex jumped up. "Guys get up! What's that sound?" he yelled at Lexi and Carlos who were puzzled as well. The two also get up and looked around. "Where is Elea---"Lexi asked drowsy before falling to the floor. "Lexi, this is no time for a nap! We gotta fi---" Alex was saying before he as well fall right next Lexi in the sand. "Crap, is it the music?" Carlos thought. He quickly pulled his hands out of his pocket and went to cover his ears. As he went to do so he noticed his movement was slowed as well as the fact he grew more and more tired. Only inches before reaching his ear Carlos fell to the floor too tired to move. He was only able to mutter "Damn it" to himself before he was out cold. Walking out from behind the forest bushes Eleanor slowly quieted her blissful tune. "Hmmm...I like these three. I think I'll play with them. Of course they won't play along with reason..." She thought. Her face lit up. "That Jack fellow doesn't seem like much fun but he is a friend of theirs." A lustful smirk grew on her face. "I'm sure Jack would gladly sacrifice himself for his friends to enjoy this game!"
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Mon Jul 07, 2014 9:10 pm

I like it so far. I feel like you could add more to a passage (or whatever you wanna call it), just seems like there hasn't been too much progress yet, but that's just my opinion. I'm looking forward to more of it. As for ideas, I don't have too many, and it should be your own muse and inspiration that take you, since I'm not writing the story and you can work best with what you wanna do, but here's a few to get you going.

You might could have her play a "game" like man hunt or something and those she catches something happens to them. Maybe have the guys wake up and go on a "safari" to try to kill whatever sang that night. Maybe have her kidnap jack and hypnotize him or something. She could try to play it sweet and innocent as Eleanor and lead them off her trail or just reveal herself and seduce them one at a time while they search for her (she'd do like guerrilla warfare or something lol). And you could always have someone make it out "alive" to follow up with a sequel if you want to plan ahead your story. Your sequel could have potential and I bet your writing style would have improved in that time. I've already seen some great improvements since the first few posts you've done here and I hope you noticed it too. Writing, like anything, takes practice and imagination. The more you practice and the more open you are, the easier and better it gets.

That's about all I got. These are just random ideas that popped in my head. Take this story however you want and I hope these inspire you (but at the same time it should be your ideas, not just mine lol). But I like it so far. Looking forward to when we get to read some action between her and the characters. Good luck with it dude.
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Tue Jul 08, 2014 3:57 pm

(As for the amount of time Its taking me to continue its because I always have these ideas of what to add to the story to make it better last second. When Im writing i tend to brainstorm of things to add while Im writing which made this story longer and will hopefully end up better then before. The short-notice changes also make the story more exciting for me so I tend to ask you for alot suggestions to inspire me for more of these. I hope this isn't a bother to you and don't worry this is about to get to the best parts within the next couple days!)

"Huh? What was that?" Cried Jack jumping up from his sleeping bag. "That sound was beautiful! Who was singing?" He pondered to himself. "Was it Lexi....or even better was it Eleanor?" Jack excited himself thinking of the two girls singing. He quickly left his room to find out the source of the heavenly noise. He was so interested in finding out who was singing from a few minutes ago he forgot to even put his shoes on. Walking through the ship and it's cold metal floor Jack stepped in something odd. He looked down to see a puddle of water he splashed in. "Cold, Cold, Cold" He panicked hoping on his other leg until he lost balance and hit his head on the metal. "OWWWWW!!!!!" he groaned before looking back at the puddle. "I know this ship is in pieces but water? Here? The ship doesn't cut into pieces until farther ahead. He shook it off and kept walking. He eventually made it down to the end of the hall where the ship broke in half and peeked over towards the lonely island. At first glanced it appeared everyone was sleeping and he became overly disappointed. Then he took a second look. He noticed where they were.  He saw how none of them were even remotely near their sleeping bags. As simple-minded as he was he knew something was weird. He ran over to Alex. "Hey, spoiled brat, wake up!" he prompted shaking Alex back and forth. Alex wouldn't wake. He tried it over and over with the others and yet they didn't wake up either. Jack even made sure their hearts was beating which they were. Confused and in a panic he ran back to his cabin to find something, anything that could help. While running over to his room he hadn't noticed that the puddle was even closer to his room. Frantically checking his room he was trying to find something to help then he heard a familiar voice coming from the door. "Hey Jack, how's everyone doing? As if I don't already know!" She laughed. "Y..You did that? How did you.." "Remember that story Alex told? About the Siren? Turns out he was dead on! Don't worry my spell on them isn't permanent they will wake up soon enough. Anyways.." She said seductively now leaning on the doorway. She muttered something incoherent to Jack before blowing him a kiss and winking at him. A rather large bubble appeared and floated over to him. Jack starred at it puzzled as to what was going on. The bubble blew up in his face and from it a voice came through. It sounded exactly like the Siren and it said "You know you can't resist me." In a soft purr. Just hearing her voice from the bubble instantly turned him on yet he was still reluctant. "Oh yeah!?" he argued "In an attempt to clear her from the door way. He kept walking away backwards still trying to get her to move. He took one final step back before slipping and falling backwards on his bed. "Yeah." She cooed back following him and dropping onto the bed with him. "What are you running from? I'm not gonna hurt you sweetie." Jack thought about that for a second. "Ever since I met her this is what i wanted right? What am I thinking she doesn't want me!"  In a final attempt of freedom he tried to get up. Big mistake. As he pushed himself up she pulled him into a french kiss. At first he did what he could to try and push her away. He slowly felt less and less willing to get away. She started to moan in ecstasy while pleasuring him before suddenly breaking the kiss. This surprised him and before he was able to back away she pulled his head into her chest. In his final moments of consciousness he heard her whisper to him "How would you like to listen to my new lullaby?" Jack didn't respond due to the amount of pleasure he just experienced and she started singing a lullaby which almost instantly put him to sleep. She disapeared into the jungle with the unconscious body of Jack "One down....Three to go."
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Wed Jul 09, 2014 4:23 pm

Alex slowly opened his eyes to staring at the bright morning sun. "Good, he's up. He heard Carlos state towering over him. "Huh, what happened?" Asked Alex with obvious drowsiness in his voice. He got up a bit dizzily stepping back and forth trying to regain his balance. "I don't know....but Jack is gone. Something strange is going on here." Lexi told him, not knowing anymore then he did. "Let's go. We need to find him!" Alex and Lexi both nodded their head and turned their attention to the jungle in front of them. Carlos look towards Lexi who had a look of anxiousness on her face. Before Carlos could say anything to her she mad a mad dash towards the forest. "Lexi, Wait!" Carlos screamed with a sense of dread on face. He looked almost as he had seen a ghost but Lexi didn't stop she seemed determined to find her friend. "Shit!" he groaned slapping his palm against his face. Alex put his hand on his brother's shoulder. "Looks as if it's me and you bro! Let's do it!" He said with a confident sneer. "Alex, did u have a dream while u were asleep?" He asked with a serious look on his face? "Now's not the time for that?" Alex told him shrugging it off. "Answer the damn question." Carlos retorted just as scared as he was before. Seeing Carlos's face and hearing his reaction he decided it best to answer the question. "No." He lied, but thinking back he remembers having one. He started thinking heavily about the dream trying to remember it being intrigued by his brother. He remembers Eleanor singing to him. Singing a lovely song but not only that. He remember's an being in water and not being able to swim. Eleanor was holding him and he remembered having a strange love for her. A strange desire to be with her. The last thing that he remembered was being in a passionate lip-lock before waking. He tried to forget about it as he and Carlos embarked on their journey to catch up to Lexi and find Jack. After 5 minutes, of walking they heard a scream. "That's Lexi!" Alex told Carlos noticing his once again horrified face. As they ran after the scream Alex felt like there was something his brother wasn't telling him.
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Wed Jul 09, 2014 7:40 pm

I like both of these! The first one was especially good. I think your take on the siren is interesting and enjoyable. Though it's not required by any means for a story like this, character development is always a plus, no matter what the medium. Take that with what you will. Character traits, attitude, specific attributes each one has makes each one more memorable and engaging. I really do like it so far and i'm not criticizing you or anything but just giving some suggestions to improve writing; it's a difficult skill to master(none of us have "mastered" it but it's great to have peers look over your work and give new perspectives). Glad to see you continuing and using some creative ideas here Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Fri Jul 18, 2014 4:30 pm

(Thank You for your suggestions and I'll try my best to add them in a useful way Very Happy)
(10 Minutes Earlier)

Lexi was trudging through the forest! Huffing and puffing she pushed onward to find her friend. During her journey she thought well and hard of her situation but she some of her thought were clouded by the fear of the death of a friend. "How could this happen! Where and why did Jack disappear?" Growing tired of her transverse across the island she slowed down near a waterfall cave and stopped near it's pond. "If I'm going to figure anything out i need to calm down." Looking around she found a nice big rock she sat down on it dipping her legs in the cool refreshing water. "Now..." She thought back to the night before Jacks disappearance. She didn't notice anything suspicious at this time other than that whoever took Jack had to have been the one to knock out her and her friends. Finally calm, she decided to turn back and wait for Carlos and Alex. There obviously was a chance that she could be caught by her self too. There was a current coming from the water that wasn't there before and as Lexi pulled her legs from the water they were stuck. This surprised Lexi as she got up and tried to jump out of the water to land. Looking towards the cave Lexi saw the figure of someone coming. "Oh it's just you!" She chuckled with a smile on her face upon noticing it was only Eleanor. "Can you help me? My leg is stuck in here" She continued. Eleanor looked at her with a face on interest. "Why would I do that? You see I need YOUR help." Lexi was puzzled. Then she thought about something. She was there that night but disappeared during the morning. "It was you!" She lashed at her once thought friend. "I see you're finally figuring it out. By the way, did you have a sweet dream last night? Was I in it?" Eleanor added with a grin. Lexi was purely shocked. How could Eleanor have known about that dream. Lexi herself shook it off as a weird thing before but didn't think anything of it. "Anyways, there is this...new ability of mine I want to test and let's just say your my lucky first test subject." Hearing these words Lexi begrudgingly pulled and pulled to get her legs out the word but to no avail she was still trapped. "Don't worry, you will see your friends again. Jack, Carlos, Alex......In fact" Eleanor muttered. "If you want, which you WILL if all goes well, like me you can keep one....for your own." Lexi didn't know how to react or what to do. She just stood there with a shocked face processing what she just heard. Eleanor slowly waltzed up to Lexi and caressed her face before whispering seductively its time into her ear. Eleanor didn't waste any time and left walking inside the waterfall's cave. Before disappearing into the water she waved a finger and water sprung up in the shape of two tentacles grabbed Lexi by the legs and dragged her into the cave with her.
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Wed Jul 23, 2014 5:01 pm

Nice job. Can't wait to see the pair gang up on someone lol.
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Sat Jul 26, 2014 8:51 pm

After hearing Lexi's scream the two ran after her. It was difficult for the two stumbling through the forest. At their speed it wasn't hard to trip on tree branches, dirt and anything else on the forest floor. Not seeing a trench in the floor Alex tripped and fell to the floor. His brother was to focused in running towards Lexi he didn't hear Alex fall. Running forward Carlos squinted through some trees and saw to figures who appeared standing still talking he hid behind a rock and tried to eavesdrop on a conversation. Squinting over at the 2 he was able to recognize them.....It was Lexi and Eleanor! He saw something dragging her off into the the cave. He planned on sneaking after them and see where Eleanor was taking Lexi. As he got up to follow the two, Alex came running in yelling at the two. "Who are you and where are my friends assholes!" This got Eleanor's attention. "Damn it, Alex!" Carlos grunted hurdling over his hiding spot. "Ahh everyone's here." she purred. "Give back Lexi!" Alex yelled running at Eleanor. Suddenly a wall of water formed between the two before Alex could get close. "You're a lively one. Sorry, but we aren't ready for you yet, honey." Eleanor winked at the two boys standing with an angry grunt on their faces. She backed up into the cave lowing the wall and dragging Lexi along the rocky cave's floor. Alex and Carlos followed closely behind until Eleanor stood in front a large pit which looked to go down into darkness. "Can we talk this through?" Carlos asked calmly in attempts to avoid a rash decision. "Hmmmm, I don't feel like talking about now sweetie...but how about we listen to some nice music? I do need too teach Little Lexi here some lessons." She closed her eyes to start singing but upon hearing some footstep to see Alex's fist inches away from her face. She instantly turned into water and Alex thrusting his whole body towards the punch fell right through her into the pit. "Shit." Carlos thought and ran to grab Alex before he fell. He was able to fall. Laying on the floor trying to pull his brother up Eleanor just chuckled. "You aren't very fun like, sweet little Alex there. You are cute though. Let him go and come with me. "Not a chance, lady!" he groaned pulling up his brother. "Still tap dat." Alex screamed trying to keep the moment light. "Not Now!" Carlos remarked back in annoyance. "Why not?" Eleanor laughed. "Well I'd love to stay and see how It's hanging but I got stuff to do!" As she said that a spout of water came from the the pit. She stood on the water and started to use it as an elevator. "....blargargarg" Alex was able to force though his mouth ass the gallons of water shot at his face. The water also made Carlos's hands moist so Alex fell into the pit completely missing Eleanor's "Water Elevator" In a moment of Life or Death Carlos jumped in after his falling brother!
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Thu Aug 07, 2014 6:04 pm

'"Wake up.......Wake Up! Lexi can you hear me? WAKE UP!" Lexi groggily struggled to open her eyes. "Come on, Lexi....I think this is it." This scare encouraged Lexi to finally open her eyes wide in enough to see. She looked for the voice that said that to her. Its Jack! "Jack!" She screamed in excitement. She tried to jump up with joy but strangely couldn't touch the floor. She noticed she was bound in shackles to the wall behind her. "Don't bother..." Jack sighed with a depressed look on his face. "The crazy bitch locked us up here. If I had to guess Carlos and Alex are left....do you know where they are?" Lexi broke down crying "Damn it all.....They tried to help me and now they're gonna end up trapped too." Jack didn't understand well but he knew well that Carlos and Alex were their only hope. He shushed Lexi. "Quiet, I hear a noise!" It sounded like footsteps coming towards them. Lexi's heart stopped. Is it Carlos and Alex she thought. They could get them out of here. To her horror it was the Siren who turned the corner. "My my my, looks you both of you are awake." She strolled over to Lexi and closed in on her face. The Siren slowly licked Lexi's cheek and whispered to her, "Why don't you join me?" Lexi used this opportunity to stall time for the two brothers to find her and Jack. "You imprisoned me here and expect me to join you? Why would I?" "Good question." Eleanor purred. She walked over to Jack. "Get away from me!" He growled with fury. She simply replied to him saying "Hold still, sweetie." She spit into his eye. The pain distracted him enough so she was easily able to grab his head and attempt pleasuring him with a french kiss. At first, Jack did nothing but try and push the Siren away as her tongue explored his mouth. Lexi also looked down at them disgusted but mid-kiss The Siren unlocked him from his chains and he pushed her aside. "Shame." She sighed "....but here's your reason." She fingered Jack to walk over to her. Strangely Jack did just that. "What the hell?" He yelled "Why am I walking towards you?" "You see love, I have a special lipgloss I cover my lips with. If you swallow it....well I control it and you."She grinned. "Or I can do this!" She flicked her finger towards Jack and his arm twisted backwards. He screamed in pain! "Now honey, Do I have to do this again or are you gonna join me?" Lexi looked towards Jack who was screaming in pain on the floor now. Lexi submitted to Eleanor. "Now you sit tight." She cooed to Jack as he obeyed begrudgingly. All you have to do is sing after me." Eleanor started to sing with her heavenly voice. Lexi was reluctant at first but started to resist less and less as the song went on. Upon finishing the song water flowed toward Lexi and covered her body. The water sank into her skin giving it a blue tint like Eleanor's. After the spectacle finished Lexi bowed to Eleanor. "I am at your command Mistress." Lexi "Perfect, would you like to keep that Oaf over there?" Eleanor asked her in a more commanding voice. "No, Mistress you my rid of him if you please." "Fair enough, we have to left. Take your pic time to go search for our pets." Jack couldn't take it anymore. He ran full at Eleanor and sent her flying towards the wall. "Lexi, while she's down!" He screamed motioning her to run! "Peasant!"Lexi screamed mad at poor Jack for hurting her mistress. She sent a heavy stream of water at Jack which upon hitting Jack against the hard stone walls killed him. "Are you ok, mistress?" Lexi panicked "Just a scratch." she sighed. "Now before we go Let's have so fun of our own." Eleanor smiled.
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PostSubject: Re: Island of the Siren   Thu Aug 07, 2014 8:44 pm

Glad to see this continued. Nice job so far.
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