another world (title open for change)

ok guys, the story will actually start in my next post on this topic, for now, i am just going to write a couple of `you should know` things about my story.

1. this story, i would like to think, is equal parts story and graphic sex, i worked and am working hard on it. it will be lengthy and have x-rated material.

2. i would love to see feedback!!!! i can not stress this enough! the more you guys give me feedback, the more motivated i will be to write!

3. lastly, the chapters are a little weird. the story has 5 main characters and they are not together very often. the chapters will alternate between the main characters perspectives. to help, i will put the characters name in parenthesis next to the chapter number. (this is a style of writting im copying from terry goodkind`s the sword of truth series, which i love!)

alright, lets start!!!

Chapter 0: Prologue

   "It's cold......" Darren mutters to himself. The cab driver makes a sort of throat clearing sound of agreement. Darren can`t help but feel aggitated at this, he had hoped for even a chance at small talk, but instead gets the only quiet driver in the city.

   All he can do is think back on his day... his week... his month even. He is tired, "Several doubles and lost days off will do that to you!" he remarks in his own head. Darren`s mind wanders ahead, what about home, what will he do then.... he finally has some off time.... "Maybe I should check out that new movie that's all over the web......."he thinks to himself and pauses... he sees his own reflection in the window and sighs... "Nah, maybe tomorrow...."

   He begins to ponder about what his life has become, boring, lonely..... he needed a change.... at least in highschool he had hobbies.... maybe video games and cartoons weren`t cool, but he still feels regret for leaving his old self and friends behind.... plus, his new, more normal, life hasn't brought any of those attractive women to his doorstep, much less his bed....

   Darren is almost startled to look up and see his house, he is already home.... he hands the driver his last twenty, and scuffles towards the front door. Darren finds himself speaking aloud without thinking, "Deep down, I still want to meet otherwordly women....". He laughs as he leans his head back to look at the night sky and whispers to himself once more, "I need to forget about my geeky school days for real...."

    And with that, Darren drops his head back down to continue heading to his front door.... only something is off.... strange even. His door is missing.... his entire house is missing... MISSING!!!! Darren panics he turns and searches, but only sees darkness.... emptiness.... and he comes to a realization. He can`t feel his body... he doesn`t know if his eyes are open and blind, or shut and unusable..... after several seconds he hears a voice.... the voice of a woman.....

Chapter 1: Awakening (Lily)

    "Get up!" the womans voice echoes throughout the dark space that Darren is trapped in. Darren tries to yell for help, he tries to yell anything at all, but just can't. He begins to fear that all hope is lost.... "Hmmmm, the potion is correct, I'm positive! I guess I'll try again..." Now Darren is confused, who is this woman, what is she talking about? In an instant it happens... Darren's heart feels like exploding for a brief second, and then a cascade of various sensations....

     First, his sense of touch, starting as a fever-like cold sweat, Darren quickly notices soft flesh pushed against his own lips, and warm, dancing flesh inside his mouth. He knew instantly he was kissing someone, and gave up any resistance to the feeling.... this was all accompanied by a strange vibration.

     Second, taste. The foreign saliva gushing into his mouth was intoxicating, it strangely tasted like mixed fruits, cinnamon, and honey all together. He drank it in more than willingly.

     Third, was the smell. He could smell all of the same tastes permiate the air, but also mixed in was the womans own perfume. Giving the smell a hint of a flowery aroma.

     Fourth, was his hearing. Darren now knew what the vibrations were, it seems that the woman was chanting something while maintaining the kiss. He didn't know what for, but it was oddly soothing.

     And at last, he could wait no more, he opened his eyes... By this time, the woman had stopped, and Darren was greeted by a ceiling of forest greenery.... "Where the hell am I!!!" he shouted. "Wait, the woman..." with this he turned his head and found her... an impossibly gorgeous woman... he could only see her perfect face as well as tufts of snow white hair push from under her hooded cloak, but that was all he needed. Pierced straight through by her large amber eyes, he could only manage to stare with his mouth gaping open. The only other thought in his head, was that he wished her skin wasn't so sickly white... almost a grayish color..... then she'd be perfect.

     The woman finally breaks the silence, "Whew, thought I was gonna hafta dump ya and get a new body. I usually get it right on the first try, ya know.". Darren is clearly confused. "What are you talking about? What did you do? Where are we? And who are you?".

     "Newborns are such a pain.", the woman sighs, "But, it can't be helped. I am Isalia, and I just birthed you. Normally people just split a fraction of sexual energy off and give it life, but not me!!! Your birth was special, I prepared a body beforehand, and a potion, AND I used a spell of my own concoction!!!!! Then I gave you the Kiss of Life... didja like it, huh?" As she gives Darren a sexy look and wink.

    After such an explaination, Darren can only utter two words, "... you're crazy.....". Isalia can only stare back with a blank face, she soon breaks into another lecture, "Listen, newborn. I'm gonna give ya a crash course in survival here, now pay attention. STAY HIDDEN.... follow the road to town, but stay out of sight. Bandits and other bad folk love to target newborns. Our bodies are made of sexual energy, and to grow stronger, we need to get more from other people. That means YOU are a perfect source of free energy right now. And I hate to say it, but the best way to forcefully get energy out of people is.... rape.... you're gonna get raped...". Darren looks on in disbelief at this completely serious nutjob..... raped? "I won't get raped... I'm a man... men never get raped, right?" Isalia's eyes grow wide with concern, "Shut the hell up will you!!!! What if someone hears you!? Even if you're lying, if people think you're a man, thats it! It's over for you!!! Next, don't ever, EVER say that you are a man, joke or not."

    That exchange is all it took.... Darren slowly pushed through his denial and came to understand something very important.... his dick was gone. When he looked down, and reached with his hands, he felt nothing, and he would have seen nothing also, IF his eyes could have seen past his newly acquired breasts.... Darren now stood a rather unimpossing 5'6, 120 lbs, with plain brown hair that feathered out a little at the ends, that reached to her shoulders, and a rather unremarkable pair of B-cup breasts pushing into C. She broke down... 5 minutes of screaming profanities, talking to herself and any number of futile attempts at coming to terms with the situation later, she stopped and looked to Isalia, "You..... you did this to me.... I'm gonna...." Isalia interrupts with a quick smile and wave, "Bye bye, try not to die!". And with that, she wafts away into her own cloak and vanishes.

    A crash of sound.... Loss of sight.... An unbearable ringing in Darren's ears. And the taste of dirt in her mouth. When she finally reclaimed some bearings her head was throbbing, she spotted blood on the ground. She looked up slowly, and took three women in her view.... but they were different.... All three had what looked to be dog  ears, and tails.... and they were all three completely naked. They were all slender, slightly tanned, and hairless aside from the head, tail and crotch. They all had similar wild unkempt golden hair.... but the one in front, held in her left hand, a club of some sort. That was what hit Darren.

    "Looks like an abandoned newborn, eh girls?" The front dog girl barked. "Here's the deal newborn. We ARE going to take your energy and kill you. But you get to choose, cooperate and have it fucked out of you.... or, we brake several bones, and fuck it out of you anyways!" The two girls in the back howl with excitement at the proposition. "If you agree, bark twice like a good doggie and turn around and show us your tail."

    Darren was lost, she felt helpless.... and even though she was confused, she realized her danger clearly enough. Scared to the point of shaking, Darren barks twice, "Woof.... woof....." and turns, to raise her ass to the aggressors. In mere instants Darren found herself being fucked from behind by one of the dog girls. Between bursts of pain, she wondered what it was, she hadn't seen any of them with male genitals, when the leader came and sat in front of Darren with her legs outstretched, giving Darren a clear view of her womanhood. With a quick circular motion and tap of her hand to the fleshy part just above her vagina, a menacingly large penis grew on the spot. Darrens eyes grew wide. "Call me crazy." The dog girl said, "But I like human mouths more. Now make me feel good. And if you try to bite, I'll break your jaw, and try this again. Understand?...." Darren nods and slowly puts the tip into her mouth, when suddenly the leader grabs Darren's hair and forces her dick all the way in. She chokes reactively, but this only makes the dog girls howl and get more excited, they fuck harder and faster, soon Darren is bleeding from more than her head.

     "All hope is lost.", Darren thought, "It's over." She resigned to her fate, when like a flash, the leader was gone. And the girl behind had stopped ramming. Darren looks up in time to see an impossibly large shield, appear out of thin air crushing the third dog girl into a tree, and breaking the tree as a result.

    Standing there, shining like the sun itself, stood yet another beautiful woman. This one, tall, at least 6'1... wearing a helmet with no face guard, a robust breastplate, guantlets and greaves all shined to perfection. And under the armor can be seen skin tight brown and white leather underwear and leggings. Nestled upon her breastplate and draped over her back was finely woven golden hair, which waved out from under her helm and ended in curls to her lower back. She leaned down to Darren.

    "Are you okay? Can you speak? I heard the howling and came as quickly as I could." At first feeling relieved and in admiration, then caution.... she remembered all the things Isalia had said.... she was right about the rape and threats.... Darren remembered to not say that she is a man.... So with her last bit of strength, Darren raised her head slightly and managed only two sentences. "I'm a newborn.... Lily. What's my savior's name?"..... as Lily quietly nodded of from consciousness she only heard one last thing from the knight.... "Bianca".... and Lily fell asleep once more.

    Chapter 1... (to be continued)

I really enjoyed this! I like the unique style of it and it seems like a really creative idea! It's definitely a little odd and I think it's because I haven't read anything like it (it's not a bad kind of odd just unexpected). I loved your descriptions and details on what everyone looked like and the action going on. I'm personally not into girl on girl (or in this case, girl with dick on guy in girl body?), but I do appreciate a fresh new idea here and I think this protagonist (darren/lily) can provide interesting story scenarios and development. I know you said there'd be 5 main protagonists and I like the idea of switching perspective between them. That's pretty cool. I'm not sure how this world works yet but I'd like to see at least one male protagonist (who stays male) up against women (with women parts). That's just my preference though. All in all, I really liked this and can't wait to read more!

Thanks for the feedback spidey..... I regret to inform you that there are no physically male characters for awhile. The main reason for this is because I wanted the male character (lily) to have a clear advantage because of the fact that he is male. I fell asleep before I could finish the chapter, but there will be more explanation before the end of the chapter, such as, lily as a male, has boundless sexual energies within, which is why he is so important to the world. I would appreciate it if you would continue to read on! Thank you so much!

Of course I'll still read it! I was just expressing my personal preferences but I can still enjoy and appreciate something not involving that. I understand your reasoning behind it and I'm sure this world and story will flesh out really well. It already has an interesting opener to get you invested in it

Chapter 1 (lily) continued

The refreshing scent of mint, among other herbs, calls to Lily's senses and pulls her from unconsciousness. She awakens and glances left and right, taking in her surroundings, and thinking back to all that happened.... to Bianca... Just as the thought crosses her mind she spots a slumped figure sitting in a chair against the wall running along the head of her bed. Hair kempt, and pulled back in a neat brown ponytail, along with all white robes, would suggest that she's a nurse. "Excuse me..." Lily calls to the sleeping caregiver. The nurse darts upright, eyes wide and mouth agape, "Awake! Yes, yes, I'll fetch her right away!!!", the panicking nurse jolts through the doorway, but not before hitting an end table and the doorframe with painful sounding thuds. "What's with her?" Lily thought, "Guess I'll just wait for "her" then...". Lily casually glances at her own plain white top and trousers then closes her eyes and waits for her visitor...

The sound of armored footsteps clamouring down the hall pull Lily's attention attention to the door. And walks in, once again shining radiantly is bianca, "Hello Lily. I trust you feel up to a little walk and lecture?", Bianca smiles warmly and gestures to Lily to leave the bed. "Sure, I have some questions as well." Lily exclaims as she hops out of the mint ridden bed. The two walk out together in a comfortable silence, through the halls and rooms of what Lily sees to be a hospital, they finally get to a neatly cut path with beds of flowers sprawling on either side, colliding colors seem to sign to the two to finally start the much needed conversation.

"Bianca." Lily starts, "Where am I? And I don't mean the town, or nation... I mean, this world.... The few people I've met since arriving here have called me a newborn... I would have died if not for you. A woman claimed to "birth" me... she only said two things, sneak into town, and don't talk about men (Lily carefully worded this so as not to claim to be a man herself). I need to know more if I'm to live past another encounter." Bianca listens on with concern, and when Lily is finished, Bianca replies "Both pieces were excellent advice I'd say. However, there is much more to know of this world.... the basics should serve you well enough for now though." Bianca sits down with Lily in between two beds of flowers, and continues speaking.

"Listen well. Each of us in this world is made of sexual energy. To become more powerful, you must take anothers energy, or have it gifted to you... you witnessed first hand, the more common method... I too have gained power in this way... but with a subtle difference in method. When all of your power is gone, you fade away and cease existing. While you are in a walled city, especially a capital like this, you will be safe. As for men... First let me say that there are none. EXCEPT, Every thousand years or so, a man arrives in this world and brings havoc in tow. Men, have an unimaginable amount of sexual energy within them. When the man arrives, and word gets to ear, the world hunts him down, and those who catch him, take that energy and rule this world with it. Typically speaking, when a nation captures the man, they rule the land until a different group captures a different man and overthrows them. This event is named the Coming of Man, and the previous two Comings where a bit strange though... The first one ended with the defeat of those who held the man, and the last was ended by the man himself. Before he was caught, he gained considerable fighting skills and killed all the beings trying to take him. Eventually the leaders of the world gave up on trying to catch him, and left him to die of age."

Lily merely sat in silence, to claim to be a man, is as good as issuing your own death sentence. And if that wasn't bad enough, she had no idea how to get back to her own world. Bianca could sense the worry locked inside Lily and tried to cheer her up, "You need not worry of troublesome fights! Keep heart, you're safe, just stay in town and take on a trade, or learn a skill to live by... perhaps becoming a baker." Bianca grinned and chirpped. That kind of contagious smile takes hold of Lily quickly, and forces her to smile also, despite her situation. The pair stand and continue walking and talking as the reach the town itself, weaving through the many streets that cut through the city as tunnels in an anthill.

Before long, they come upon the training grounds, where many of the soldiers of the nation and any who are in want or need of practice in martial arts are welcome. This site inspires a bit of an epiphany in Lily, knowing that she is very likely the current Coming of Man, and the story of the previous man fighting and defeating those who would capture him, she asks Bianca, "Maybe I should become a fighter... learn to defend myself. You never know... I may save you one day!" The warm and kind Bianca had gone, what now stood before Lily was a cold, devoted and resolute knight, who shields her country, as well as her heart. In a booming voice, almost startling Lily, she speaks, "I do not tolerate making light of such things, I'll have you know! This path is rife with fears, sorrows, and loss. You lose your friends... your teachers and students... and also your chance at a peaceful life. You dedicate your being to defending yourself and others, for once you acquire greater power, greater energy... you WILL be hunted by your foes. So I say this once, and ONLY once, will you bear that burden? If not, speak of this matter no more...".

Pausing due to the sudden shift in tone, Lily contemplates once more her decision, but comes quickly to the same conclusion as before. Lily is a man... she needs to return to her world. Gaining power and searching, is a much better option than sitting on her hands in this town waiting for a solution to come to her. And even if she were to wait, if her secret got out, she would not have the power to prevent her own death. With a determined glare she responds, "I have made my choice Bianca. I will fight to survive in this world, and to help others survive here as well." Bianca's demeanor lightens again and shows a slight smile, "I'm sorry Lily. You've just made a decision that will ruin your life... But I'm happy to have a new comrade, and I'll do what I can, when I can, to assist you. Now you train by yourself, or find a commander to train under. Once you dedicate yourself to a commander, you must obey her as a soldier of this, the human country. If you survive and grow strong, perhaps you will gain a seat of power to call your own. Goodbye Lily." The proud knight, and new ally walks away in the direction of the training fields, quickly becoming lost to sight in the crowds.

Lily aimlessly walks through the fields, eyeing everyone and anyone, especially those who stand out and look important. After traveling from one end of the fields to the other, she begins to double back when an aura grabs her attention. It's faint, but it is the only one like it on any person here. She approaches the woman with the aura cautiously until she comes within range of sight. It apperas that she is indeed a commander, known only as Cateline. Despite her assumed position of power, she only stands and watches her students and troops, occasionally uttering orders in a calm and soothing tone, seemingly devoid of anger. Lily approaches closer rather timidly and quietly, when she gets within a reasonably close distance, Lily calls out to Cateline meekly, "U-um, Commander Cateline? I would like you to t-train me... uh, please ma'am...". This call makes the commander turn to eye the source of the request. And at this distance, Lily can make out details about the intimidating woman. She stands roughly 5'9 with silky hair, raven black, straight and soft as if satin were draped around her stunning figure, reaching to her ankles. She is almost completely covered with a light blue robe, which starts at the neck and falls to her feet. The ony noticeable part of the woman is her ornately decorated headband, a dark blue, inlaid with only a few jewels and golden trim, used to cover her forehead. The last thing and most fearful that Lily sees of this woman is her eyes. The iris, pupils and whites seemed to be reversed. The whites of her eyes were instead pitch black, it surrounded the velvet blue iris that seemed to glow, which was pierced in the center by a pure white pupil. Such a site took Lily back and made her hesitate.

"Granted. Please join the others." Is all that escaped the commanders lips, by way of fluid and tranquil speech, deserving of one with important standing. Cateline began to turn around once again, when Lily blurted out suddenly, "I just!... I just wanted to know why you are the only one here with an aura? Does that mean you are strong? Should I avoid enemies with similar auras for now? Please teach me ma'am." This innocent inquiry caused Cateline to have a second stronger look at the new arrival. "You seem to be but an ordinary newborn... but upon closer inspection, you have an interesting energy... do you truly wish to be my student?" The commanders sudden interest catches Lily off guard, she stiffens and yells back nervously "Of course commander Cateline! Please teach me!" Cateline's features remain unchanged, and she motions to the center of a large earthen circle... an arena. "Fight me then. But know this. I will defeat you, if I were an enemy, you'd be dead. Also know that none who stand where you do now, have passed this test. Should you fail, you are free to join the rest or change your choice of leader.". "Understood!" shouts Lily as she enters the circle.

Lily takes her stance first, clearly amateurish, some deformed boxing style that comes naturally to her. At the site of this, the crowd hoots and laughs at what they know is coming. Cateline then disrobes, much to the surprise of the onlookers. Under her robe was hidden an exquisite body, supple and smooth, hiding the underlying threat of her power. Clothed in only a simple dark blue dress, which did it's best to cover her large breasts and dropped down only barely to her thighs, the small amount of clothing was form fitting and showed much. Her limbs however, were covered in a similar fashion as her headband. Dark blue gloves and leggings covering hand to shoulder, foot to thigh, all bearing intricate golden threadwork as well as the occasional jewel or two. Cateline possed fair and pale skin like moonlight, this was contrasted however by the calous and scarred skin of her bare hands and feet, showing a lifetime of battles and training. "Commander Cateline, this is hardly an appropriate foe for..." a nameless face in the crowd balks. "I make the rules here, or would you join my opponent in the arena?" Cateline asks the questioner bluntly paying the soldier no more heed.

As Cateline readies her attack, and makes an open palm, she notices Lily staring with worry, not at Cateline, but what seems to be the area just outside of Cateline's open hand, where her energy is gathered. "It's as I thought. She can see it, a truely rare gift." Cateline thinks to herself. "Defend against this attack young one. I will teach you an important lesson, and set you on your path to true strength with this alone." Cateline claims to Lily. With as much determination as Lily could muster, she stoodfast against what was to be an impossibly strong opponent. Cateline slowly pushes her hand forward, palm directed at Lily. Easily tracking the arms motion, Lily has no chance however of tracking the lightning fast energy hurled into her chest. The attack had landed successfully.

Lily stood frozen. As if gripped by an unseen hand, her face flushed with red, "Unnnggghhaaaaa <3.." A loud moan escapes Lily's clenched throat. For internally, Lily was suffereng from indescribable pleasure, an erotic feeling gathered in her chest like none other. Cateline held her hand outstretched keeping the energy in Lily's chest. "Know that you are among the weakest of this world, and steel yourself." Cateline explains. In the meantime, Lily had released her bladder, the entirety of which sprayed over her white trousers staining them a shade of yellow. Cateline then swipped her hand downward in a fierce but graceful motion, and just as quickly, the irresistable pleasure darted to Lily's pelvis, overwhelming her senses. Her knees buckle, she falls to her hands and knees, ass in the air, "AAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!" along with the scream of pleasure, Lily's juices shoot from her pussy with a force visible despite her urine stained trousers. The fluids evacuating from Lily's body continue slowly, unable to end the orgasm, as Cateline walks towards her kneeling shaking victim. "Do not worry young one. I will train you. You and you alone have passed this test, and I am grateful for finally recieving a true pupil to my martial arts. When you awaken, I will begin honestly teaching you." Cateline puts her hand on the immobile Lily's buttocks still quivering and twitching in the air, "But this last one... is my reward to you Lily... Fall to slumber in a world of pleasure." with that, Cateline pats Lily's twitching ass with a light smack, sending as much energy as before, directly into Lily's ass. This produces a second orgasm with renewed force and fluids, spraying from the poor girl uncontrollably. Lily's mind goes blank, and passes into the all to familiar world darkness once again.

Chapter 1: Awakening (Lily) end