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PostSubject: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Thu Aug 12, 2010 10:29 pm

So, I'm currently working on a second chapter of my "Bedazzling Burlesque" Sailor Moon fic, and I'm trying to figure out some ideas for situations. Basically, the format of the story is that each of the senshi get isolated into a part of the burlesque house that has a completely different theme, wherein they are seduced and eventually made over to become a burlesque girl to fit the theme of the room. Themes can range from rave (currently one of my planned themes, probably gonna be the one for my next chapter, but as of yet I am still unsure) to pink and girly, and anything in between. I would love to hear any and all ideas/requests anyone might have.

Please provide at your leisure:

Theme ideas:
Details about the girl seducing the senshi in the themed room:
Any attacks used by the main girl of the themed room or her henchgirls:

I appreciate any and all suggestions, thoughts, and ideas. I may not use some of them, but I would love the input, so please don't be afraid to put forth ideas! You might just see them in a fic ^_^
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PostSubject: Re: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Fri Aug 13, 2010 12:43 am

Im not really good at making up themes but I am great at making up attacks! So if u give me one of ur themes, I can basically make a wide veriaty of attacks for ya!
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PostSubject: Re: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Fri Aug 13, 2010 1:24 am

Well, like I said, I'm leaning toward my raver girl theme. Any thoughts? :3
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PostSubject: Re: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Sat Aug 14, 2010 6:47 pm

I'm not exactly sure what you mean by theme. Going by your examples (raver, pink/girly) I'm guessing you're looking for things like goth, or preppy. Maybe someone who acts like she's a queen or princess. Or someone who is uptight and strict. Am I missing the mark?

I suppose for an uptight/strict character, whatever she's wearing should be properly worn (i.e. all wrinkles ironed out, No button undone, skirt precisely measured.) She would heckle the senshi's lack of decorum. She would personally make them over into a new burlesque girl handling even the most seemingly insignificant detail.

I'm not sure about her attacks, but it would interesting to see her blow her a kiss and toss it at someone like a ninja star for interrupting her (Sorta like the Oh My Goddess video). Also, for the "final attack" she would show the senshi how to kiss "properly." I'll leave that up to your imagination, I wouldn't want to limit your creativity. Wink
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PostSubject: Re: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Sat Aug 14, 2010 10:23 pm

Well, when I say "theme" (I guess I didn't explain that one too well) I mean more like.... well, more like their appearance and their power set and their lair's theme. For instance, "school" might be a theme, where the mistress of the room would be a teacher, their henchwomen would be students, and all of their attacks would be very teacherly, you know? Or maybe "feudal japan" might be a theme, wherein the mistress and all her henchwomen would maybe be dressed as ninjas and geishas and whatnot, know what I'm saying? Am I making any more sense here? If you need me to further explain, I will happily expound Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Sat Aug 14, 2010 11:09 pm

I think I get it now. So another example could be like a pop idol or rock star, with the theme being a concert and her henchwomen being back-up singers or groupies? Or a hospital theme with nurses supporting the doctor mistress?
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PostSubject: Re: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Sat Aug 14, 2010 11:21 pm

Exactly! And ooooooh, both of those are actually great ideas! I especially like the pop/rock star one! Any ideas within either of those? Attacks? Ideas? Moments? Specific details? Clothing? Good phrases?
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PostSubject: Re: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Sat Aug 14, 2010 11:22 pm

Btw, please don't limit yourself in the ideas you give here; I know you don't want me to feel hampered in my creativity, but it helps me more if you give me more info and creative material to work off of. I'll pick and choose bits and pieces I want to use and put my creative spin on it as I please =D
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PostSubject: Re: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Sat Aug 14, 2010 11:53 pm

Hmm... I can't think of much for the pop/rock theme now. But for the hospital theme:

Clothing:
The Mistress has to have a lab coat. Glasses would be nice, the kind that hide the eyes behind a blinding glare. Under the lab coat, a corset or something that shows cleavage. A hip hugging mini skirt, stockings and heels for her legs, maybe? The image I have is of a slightly sluttier looking Kyoko (from Rival Schools).

The Nurse outfit is pretty standard (Nurse cap, short sleeved mini-dress), though if I must demand something it would be shoulder length white latex gloves.

Attacks:
I can see the Nurses wrapping up the senshi with bandages. Perhaps giving a seemingly innocuous kiss to a wound that later develops into something else (hypnotic, or maybe it blocks the senshi's power).

As for the Doctor herself... when things get serious she may use a syringe filled with a "poison" on her victim and then tell her victim that a kiss is the cure (when it fact it triggers her makeover).

That's all I can think of now. Sorry if it's not very useful.
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PostSubject: Re: Help with my fic "Bedazzling Burlesque"   Sun Aug 15, 2010 11:51 am

I got one that I can jot down real quick, a middle eastern harem theme, with a tall dark skin beauty with long wavy black hair at the center of all these girls dressed in middle eastern dancer outfits(you know, loose and veil-ly. The mistress of the harem will have one of those opium pipe thingies(a pipe with a connecting hose to a glass chamber filled with gas). There can be plenty of mesmerizing dancing, veiled kisses, smoke blowing, and maybe for a transformation she's put into the large gas chamber and smoked of all her sailor powers, then taken out and clothed by the harem, and finally kissed by the mistress, putting a veil over those lips so they'll only be her's.

Here is a link to the opium thing I was talking about
http://i583.photobucket.com/albums/ss276/flandre-the-sinner/miyukichan.jpg

And here's some dancer outfit ideas
http://i583.photobucket.com/albums/ss276/flandre-the-sinner/___Dance_for_Me____by_jimryu.jpg

http://i583.photobucket.com/albums/ss276/flandre-the-sinner/RicosMydsisiandancer.jpg
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