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Zesquid
Posts : 885 Join date : 2009-11-11 Age : 35
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Sat Mar 16, 2013 11:49 pm | |
| Oh wow, that's amazing! And beyond the cover there will be a comic? Fantastic | |
| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Sun Mar 17, 2013 12:25 am | |
| yeah, the cover was actually free, lol. | |
| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Sun Mar 31, 2013 6:54 am | |
| VanuLove's HDD died, but I got a page from Vanja this morning. | |
| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Wed Apr 17, 2013 2:03 pm | |
| Another page from Vanja's comic: | |
| | | wolfzero001
Posts : 1251 Join date : 2009-11-09 Age : 34 Location : Why do you want to know?! O.O
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Wed Apr 17, 2013 7:33 pm | |
| They should run... very fast! B3 * would accually be the one that is all " Oh hai, ladies! O///w///O " in that situation* =w= | |
| | | overlordvoid
Posts : 279 Join date : 2013-04-19
| Subject: this looks so promising Tue Apr 23, 2013 9:01 pm | |
| - wolfzero001 wrote:
- They should run... very fast! B3 * would accually be the one that is all " Oh hai, ladies! O///w///O " in that situation* =w=
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| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Thu May 02, 2013 6:35 am | |
| The kiss looks a little weird, but I'm not feeling too picky on this one. This makes my first commission halfway done (she does 24 panels per commission) then I'm going to commission her again to finish the chapter. I'll probably wrtie a script for chapter 2 soon as well with a lot more actual sex than this one. | |
| | | NeoGeno450
Posts : 1280 Join date : 2013-02-07
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Thu May 02, 2013 3:38 pm | |
| speaking of kisses....you forgot to try and get your commission slot from Jackurai! | |
| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Thu May 02, 2013 4:06 pm | |
| I actually messaged him, but I was out and couldn't send him a script fast enough. Been having trouble deciding what I really want for a 3rd part. I might just make up a new premise and send it to him for next time | |
| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| | | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Thu May 16, 2013 6:41 pm | |
| Vanja sent me 2 more pages today: ^ With this I've got 18 of the 40 panels in the Chapter 1 script I sent her. I've also been working on a panel-by-panel script for the future chapters of this I'd like and sent Vanja this outline for approval: - Quote :
- I'm not 100% sure of this yet, but I was thinking the series would go something like:
Chapter 1: What I've given you so far.
Chapter 2 (with a different cover than I originally had in mind which I'll describe in the updated script): After being left in his cell for awhile, which is regularly misted with succubus pheromones, and being fed food rich in aphrodisiacs and special medications designed to make his sperm more nutritious and improve his sexual performance, the slave is brought out again to see how well these aforementioned treatments have taken effect. On his way to the girls' bedroom, though, another slave sneaks a pill into his hand which the protagonist takes figuring he hasn't much to loose. The girls start him off with some paizuri and find that his improved semen feels amazing when massaged into their breasts. They have him tit fuck them more, carefully cum on each of their breasts, and then bind his arms and make him use his cock to massage it into their skin. Just as the slave's testicles start to feel funny from the pill taking effect, the girls decide it's time to really get down and dirty.
Chapter 3: More conventional sex during which the slave cums several times. As he's starting to feel worn out the girls insist that they're just getting started, but pass out due to the slave's semen being drugged by the pill (unfortunately for him the drug wasn't particularly potent or fast-acting). As his free will starts to return the slave stumbles off the bed (he can barely walk at this point) and manages to find a set of cell keys which he intends to you to free the slave who helped him and possibly his former master. After holding the keys for a moment, though, the heart gem on his collar and a similar contraption on the key ring start beeping and blinking, alerting the two "greater succubi" (larger and with visible wings and tails) who act as guards to come and investigate. The slave hurries (best he can) toward the bedroom door only to find one of the guards on the other side of it. As he turns around the second one teleports in behind him and he runs face-first into her breasts (she's tall enough for his face to meet up with them perfectly). The two of them sandwich his head between their breasts and he's overpowered by their strong pheromones, causing him to cum rather violently and pass out.
The slave wakes up bound to a wall (similar to the first chapter's cover) confronted by Lilith a Meri who are very disappointed in him, but also impressed he was able to recover his free will so quickly when most slaves wouldn't have been able to think of anything but sex for days after what he had been through. After giving him a kiss which makes him incapable of lying one of the girls asks who had given him that pill. The culprit is then seen being smothered by the guards until the pheromones break his will. The girls could give the slave an antidote but decide to punish him by giving him a kiss that causes most of his bodily fluids to rapidly go into sperm production (much more so than usual) and is hooked up to something (I'm not sure exactly what yet) that will milk him until there's no trace of the drug left in his system. If he survives, the slave is told, he might be "breeder material." The chapter ends with the slave being milked relentlessly as the girls satisfy their hunger with the giant squiggly (which is brought into the room so the slave can watch).
^ I should probably break that up a bit, but I'm not sure where yet...
Chapter 4: After being unconscious for a few days the slave wakes up in a hospital bed as a succubi nurse is inspecting his cock. Since he survived his punishment in the last chapter and the nurse deems his cock and balls fit for service again, Lilith and Merri enter him as a contestant in the Sperm Slave Olympics their queen organizes every couple of years, the winner of which is declared "king" and allowed to impregnate the queen and any others who want daughters. The absolute looser is turned into a squiggly giving the slaves added incentive to do their best. Each competing slave is given some of the queen's vaginal fluid to drink which sends them into a sexual frenzy. They are then released in separate obstacle courses filled with succubi who try to wear them out with sex and break their will to compete with kisses. The first to finish the course is given a large point bonus, but points are also earned by making succubi cum and a certain amount is added to a slave's score for every mL of semen produced (the succubi collect it all afterward). Watching from the audience, Lilith and Meri are torn as to whether or not they actually want him to win or place above last so he remains human and they can still keep him for themselves. Another slave reaches the end of his course first, but the chapter ends with some uncertainty as to whether or not he won since the protagonist has been making more succubi cum and firing larger loads into them.
Chapter 5: As the contest is going on back in the castle, two greater succubi have decided to capture a full village full of men. The chapter begins with the men standing naked, erect, and dazed from the pheromones and kisses in front of a stage the greater succubi are standing on. They tell the crowd their new purpose and life and then ask them to form lines based on their penis sizes. The well-endowed men are seen lining up to be kissed, collared, and then led into one of several barred carriages. As the others are about to become squigglies, though, a sexy, female, angel-like figure appears and tells the succubi they've gone too far this time.
Meanwhile, back at the castle, the protagonist has just barely scored high enough to win the Sperm Slave Olympics and receives a kiss from the queen, leaving a permanent golden kissmark on the head of his penis which, not only represents a crown of sorts, but raises his sexual prowess even more. As he's about to fuck the queen, though, the angel from before barges in and says she's going to send all the succubi back to their own dimension. After doing so (she's much more powerful than any of them), she turns all the squigglies back to normal and restores the rest of the slaves to more normal states. As she approaches the protagonist, though, she's impressed by his "assets" and the fact that he won the golden kissmark. She offers to return him to normal the best she can (the golden kiss can't be removed) or take him with her to their sky kingdom where they are in need of his special "talents." Being completely infatuated with her, the slave agrees to the later as the hero watches and wonders how much choice in the matter he actually has. The series ends with the former-slave showering a group of angels in cum as the one from before explains that, while the angels don't need to feed on semen to survive, their magical powers and ability to fight off demons like the succubi are greatly enhanced by it. She kisses the protagonist on the cheek and he wonders if much has really changed.
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| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Thu Jun 06, 2013 10:07 am | |
| Changed the title of the thread since it's more about my stuff from Vanja than VanuLove. Also, | |
| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Sat Jun 08, 2013 8:18 am | |
| ^ That's the last page of my first commission from Vanja. Everything seen here so far was $125, which seems like a good deal to me! | |
| | | Zesquid
Posts : 885 Join date : 2009-11-11 Age : 35
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Sun Jun 09, 2013 12:15 am | |
| All wonderful stuff! Thank you so much for your contributions. By the way, is there any more to the black and white commission there? I'm rather curious; the artist's style is really good, and I'd love to see more of it. | |
| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Sun Jun 09, 2013 5:34 am | |
| Those are only rough sketches of what will eventually be a full color comic. The artist is just really dragging ass with it :/ . | |
| | | Zesquid
Posts : 885 Join date : 2009-11-11 Age : 35
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Sun Jun 09, 2013 9:03 pm | |
| Ok, just thought I'd ask | |
| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Tue Jun 18, 2013 7:13 am | |
| I've written about 38 pages (in Word, dunno what that will translate to in the comic >_>) of the script for Succubus Dungeon so far, leaving me just at the end of what I originally thought would be chapter 3; I ended up dividing it into two chapters in order to make the erotic sequences more elaborate, so now I'm at the beginning of chapter 5.
At this point I want to say I've written about 2/3rds of it, but I'm really not sure as everything tends to get longer as I start getting into it. Assuming Vanja keeps accepting my commissions (I pay her for 24 panels at a time), this could be going on for 1.5 to 2 years >_>
Anyways, I plan on combing through the script real quick for errors and then sharing it here later. Suggestions are welcome, but understand that I'm still the one paying for this and have very particular fetishes. | |
| | | monked80
Posts : 71 Join date : 2013-01-03
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Tue Jun 18, 2013 10:21 am | |
| damn your really putting that work into this. gj and can't wait | |
| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Fri Jun 21, 2013 12:55 pm | |
| Well, here's what I've got so far... As I hadn't settled on character names while writing much of this, characters are just referred to by either their lipstick colors or roles in the story. I'll be giving Vanja references for newer characters as their commissions actually come up, but haven't decided on exact appearances as of now since it will be awhile before they are relevant anyways. Just understand that Red, Blue, the queen, and the other "greater succubus" are all a bit taller and larger than the girls seen so far, and that Red and Blue have very strong elastic bra/panty straps (relevant to a few panels later on). Obviously this could stand to be proofread further and probably stream-lined a bit, but it should give anyone interested a decent idea as to what's going to happen: Chapter 1 (most of which is already done and posted here): - Spoiler:
Succubus Dungeon New Slave #1 Cover: The sperm slave is naked and has his collar on. He's shackled to the wall and looks embarrassed/vulnerable. The succubi are on each side, kissing his cheeks. A few pink and purple kiss marks can be seen on his chest, one on each testicle, a few on the shaft of his penis, which is standing up a bit (or maybe being held up that way by Pink?), and a pink one right around the urethra (it's fine if only the bottom lip of this is visible). The cover doesn't have to show full bodies. It could cut off a bit after the slave's balls and not show the ends of his arms, if that makes things easier. Panel 1: Pink and Purple are sitting on a big bed on either side of their last sperm slave. The man looks dehydrated and appears to be unconscious. His penis is long, but flaccid and his balls look shriveled up and there are pink and purple kiss marks all over them and his shaft from the girls trying to "jumpstart" him. He also has a collar on with a little heart gem on it. There's a small pool of cum under his penis head and the two girls have some cum on them as well. Pink is mad and Purple's underwhelmed. Pink: "God dammit! That was only like, what, four loads? I'm still hungry!" Purple: "*Sigh* Well, we have been working him pretty hard lately. He might just be worn out. Human men can't do this forever, you know." Panel 2: Pink is smacking the flaccid penis against her breast to no avail. Pink: "Ungh, at this rate we'll have to go find another cock any day now. I feel like we just got this one!" Panel 3: A series of loud thuds, suggesting that someone's banging on the door upstairs ,can be heard. Purple is looking toward the source of the noise. Purple: "Or maybe one's just come to us..." Panel 4: The hero and his apprentice are standing outside the door to the succubus castle. The door has a big metal relief of an ejaculating penis on it and there are statues of naked succubi on each side of the door. The hero is banging away at the door while his apprentice is looking at the dick, kind of weirded out. Hero: "Come out and face us, vile demons!" Panel 5: The doors have opened revealing Pink and Purple. Pink: "Alright!" Panel 6: The hero swings his sword and the apprentice has just drawn his. Panel 7: Pink catches the sword. Panel 8: Pink has pulled the sword toward her, causing the hero to fall face first into her bust. Panel 9: The apprentice is rushing toward them with his sword ready. Panel 10: Purple is holding her hand out and it is glowing with some sort of magic. An aura has appeared around the apprentice, holding him in place. He's let go of his word. Purple: "Wait your turn." Panel 11: Pink is kissing the hero on the lips. The hero's eyes are wide open and he appears to be in some state of shock. Panel 12: The hero is standing still, helpless, there's a pink kissmark around his lips and a buldge in his pants. Pink is taking his belt off. Pink: "Hehe <3 Now that you're being a bit more reasonable, let's take a look at your other sword..." Panel 13: The hero's pants and underpants are off now. Both girls are kneeling down next to him. Pink is looking at his penis, which is average at best, if not a bit small. She looks really pissed off. Purple is looking up at the rest of his body. Pink: "That's it!? Geez buddy, what are you good for?" Purple: "Hmm, he is kind of cute, though..." Panel 14: Pink is spraying him with some kind of perfume that will turn him into a squiggly. contact with it is making an aura appear around him. Pink: "Better off as a squiggly, if you ask me!" Purple: "That was fast." Panel 15: The hero has turned into a squiggly and is now roughly 9 to 10 inches tall. It's surrounded by its old clothes. Panel 16: The girls are approaching the apprentice, who is still caught in Purple's magic aura. Purple is applying a new coat of lipstick. Pink: "For your sake I hope you're hiding something nice in there..." Panel 17: Purple is kissing the apprentice on the cheek causing a similar shock to what the hero experienced and a much larger bulge to appear in his pants. Pink is pulling his belt off and licking her lips at the sight of the bulge. Panel 18: Pink has just pulled the hero's pants and underpants down, causing his large cock to spring out. It's at least a foot long and has respectable girth. It's also rather smooth and his balls similarly smooth and quite large. There's a bit of precum coming out the tip and both girls are shocked. A purple kissmark is visible on the hero's cheek and the aura's gone as it's no longer necessary; he can't resist. Purple: "Wow..." Pink: "Holy shit, is this kid human!?" Panel 19: Close up of Pink kissing the tip of the guy's penis. Panel 20: Similar view, but Pink has now pulled her head away a bit after the kiss. A pink kissmark can be seen on the tip and there's a thin trail of precum going from it to her mouth. Purple (from outside the panel): "I take it this one's a keeper?" Pink: "Oh yeah. Let's get him stripped down and collared..." Panel 21: The girl's new sperm slave has been stripped naked and Purple is putting a collar around his neck, similar to the one the guy in the beginning had. Pink is merrily tossing both his and the hero's clothes into a fireplace. Kissmarks are still visible on the guy's cheek and penis tip (this will go without saying whenever it's practical). Purple: "This collar will track your every movement and is impossible to remove by any human means, so don't even try it." Pink: "Also, you won't be needing these clothes here <3" Panel 22: The girls are leading their sperm slave down into the dungeon. He's still being compliant due to the effects of the lipstick. Purple has the squiggly in her hand. Pink: "Alright, let's take you down to the dungeon and see what that cock of yours can really do!" Panel 23: The girls and their new slave are walking down a corridor of the dungeon. At least 2 cells can be seen in the background. One has a another sperm slave getting his dick sucked by a succubi and the other, which they're walking toward, has a bunch of squigglies in it. The squiggly cell has some cum dripping down its walls. Pink: "Welcome to your new home!" Panel 24: Purple has entered the squiggly cell and is setting the new one down next to the others. Some have kissmarks on them and one is randomly ejaculating on her. Purple: "Don't worry about your friend, by the way. We turn inadequate men into these so they don't get wasted. As far as we know they aren't hurt in the process" Pink: "Yeah, if anything he'll just have more fun this way!" ________________________________________________________________________________ Panel 25: The girls and their slave have stopped in front of a cell with a giant squiggly in it, which is quite a bit taller than any of them (2.5-3 meters, maybe?). The giant squiggly some kiss marks on it, a pair of panties stretched over its head, and a bra sitting on one of its balls. Someone had also used lipstick to draw a heart with a cupid arrow on it. This cell has more cum dripping down the walls and some on the ceiling. Purple: "A mutation some members of your species seem to have causes some men to react differently to the treatment." Pink: "Yeah, we'd turn your little hero friend and all the others into these if we could figure out what causes it, exactly." Panel 26: The girls are securing their slave to a table similar to the one in the "guy bound" picture. Pink: "Anyways, we like to test newcomers out a bit before showing them to their cells." Panel 27: Close up of the girls applying new lipstick. Purple: "This lipstick is specially formulated to help you ejaculate more." Pink: "We're going to make you cum as hard as we possibly can now so we can train you to put out more for us later <3" Panel 28: Close up of the girls each kissing one of his testicles and a sound effects of some sort to imply that that they're rapidly filling up with more semen. The guy is moaning from outside the panel. Panel 29: The two girls, seen from behind, are crowding around his cock. Several "Chu" noises are coming from all the action their heads are obscuring. Panel 30: Close up of the slave's penis and testicles, which now have several new pink and purple kiss marks on them. Pink is passionately kissing the side of his penis head and Purple is doing the same to his shaft. Panel 31: From above the girls are seen crawling up the slave's body, toward his face. His penis is throbbing intensely and it, along with his whole pelvic region, are covered with an excessive amount of pink and purple kisses. Panel 32: POV (slave's perspective) of the girls hovering over the slave's face as they apply more lipstick. Panel 33: POV (slave's perspective again) of the girls with their eyes closed and lips puckered as they're closing in to kiss him more. Panel 34: Black panel with some kissing sound effects and different pink and purple kiss marks all over it. Panel 35: Several minutes later. The slave is seen from above. His facial expression is that of pleasurable anguish, his balls are a bit larger, his member looks like it's about to explode, and his entire body is covered in pink and purple kissmarks. Pink: "Heheh. Looks like he's about to blow..." Panel 36: Purple pokes the head of his penis. Panel 37: The slave erupts with a giant load of cum, forming a comically large jizz fountain, which the girls are staring up at in amazement. Both girls: "Wow!!!" Panel 38: The girls are absolutely drenched with cum. Pink is happily licking some off one of her tits and Purple has collected some in her palm, which she's now pouring into her mouth. Panel 39: The girls are mostly cleaned off now and have proceeded to lick cum off the slave, who has passed out, but is still erect. Panel 40: The girls are looking at his erect member after having licked all the cum off it. The lipstick marks are still there (they don't come off easily). Pink: "He's still hard too <3" Purple: "We shouldn't make him cum like that again so soon, though. It could kill him." Pink: "*Sigh* Yes, I know..."
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| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Fri Jun 21, 2013 12:56 pm | |
| Chapter 2: - Spoiler:
Succubus Dungeon New Slave #2 Cover: A view similar to the "underboob cover" picture, but without a third girl on top. Pink is on the left and Purple is on the right, with both her breasts completely visible as in the picture. Their facial expressions should look more seductive than those in the reference -- perhaps something like the ones that have in the second page of the first chapter (when they're opening the door)? Panel 1: View from the side of the sperm slave laying down on the bed in his cell, thinking to himself. His penis is rock hard and he has a bit of pre-cum at his tip. His testicles are also larger than they were in the first chapter. Aside from the slave and his bed a small heart shaped hole in the wall above him can be seen. Slave (thinking to himself): I've been here for awhile now, but have no way of knowing exactly how long... Panel 2: A flashback image (so maybe it's hazy or something?) of the slave (unbound) laying on a larger bed as Purple fucks him in a reverse cowgirl position and Pink sits on his face. Both girls are topless and panty-less, but have their usual arm and foot/legwear on. Some random kissmarks can be seen on whatever parts of the slave are visible. Slave (again, thinking to himself): At first they brought me out regularly for sex, sometimes until I'd pass out, but that soon stopped and I've been confined to my cell since. Panel 3: Close up of that heart shaped hole in the wall which is now spraying some kind of pink mist. Slave (thinking): The cell's regularly misted with some kind of pheromone. Panel 4: Close up of a tray with a bowl of pink mush in it and a glass of pink fluid on it which is being placed in the cell by a pair of feminine hands. Slave (thinking): And my food seems to be drugged. Panel 5: Close up of the slave's penis and testicles, showing in detail how large his balls have become. Slave (thinking): Whatever this stuff is, it's changing me: I've had an erection the entire time I've been here and my testicles are growing. I can feel them producing semen all the time, as if my body is devoting everything it has to that one function. Panel 6: Another flashback scene, this time of the slave cumming on Pink and Purple's faces, both of whom have their mouths open. There are some kissmarks on the slave's dick. Slave (thinking): All I can think about is sex most of the time and I want to masturbate, but I was told not to -- that I'd be punished if I wasted any sperm. It's impossible for me to disobey them... Panel 7: The slave's thought are interrupted and as he looks toward the door of his cell, alerted by Purple (out of panel) opening his cell door and speaking. Purple: "Good morning, dear!" Panel 8: Slave's POV (he's still laying down) as he looks forward -- Purple (fully clothed) is kneeling at the foot of the bed, leaning over in front of the slave's penis ,so her breasts are right behind it, and picking up the pre-cum with her finger tip. Purple: "Sorry for leaving you cold for so long. The treatment works best when you don't ejaculate for awhile..." ________________________________________________________________________________ Panel 9: Purple is licking the cum off the tip of her finger. Purple: "All our slaves are given special treatments to make their cum more nutritious... Mmm! and delicious!" Panel 10: Purple is pressing her breasts up against the slave's cock, causing it to arch toward his chest a bit more and some more pre-cum is dripping off its tip. Purple: "It should have improved your sexual prowess and ability to control ejaculations as well, but we'll have to test to be sure..." Panel 11: Purple kissing the sperm slave on the lips. He looks a bit dazed as if he's being hypnotized. Panel 12: Purple's face looming over the slave's after the kiss. A lipstick mark can be seen on his lips and he still looks dazed. Purple: "Now then, you'll come back with me to our chambers, won't you?" Panel 13: The slave is following Purple down a cell corridor. There's a bit of distance between the 2 of them and she's not looking back as his compliance is assumed. At least one cell can be seen in the background with another sperm slave in it, behind Purple but ahead of the sperm slave. The slave in the cell is looking at the protagonist. Panel 14: A close up of the two slaves' hands as the one in the cell slips a pill into the other's hand. Panel 15: A close up of the slave tossing the pill he just got in his mouth. Slave (thinking): "I have no idea what this is, but I haven't got much to lose..." Panel 16: Purple is presenting the slave to Pink, who is kneeling on their large bed with only her sleeves and leggings on. Pink is staring eagerly at the slave's cock, which is throbbing. Purple: "Alright Lilith, I got him!" Pink: "Hey, looks like the treatment really worked!" Panel 17: Pink is kissing the slave's balls as Purple takes her dress off. Panel 18: Purple (now undressed except for her gloves and shoes) has turned the slave around and is pushing him onto the bed. Some pink kiss marks can be seen on his balls. Panel 19: Slave's POV as he's lying on his back and looking toward Purple, who is kissing the bottom of his penis head in a manner similar to the "kissing bottom of the head" picture. Pink can be seen as well, sitting a bit to the slave's right. NOTE: For several panels onward Purple is to the slave's left and Pink is to his right. Pink and Purple's positions relative to one another don't change much until Purple goes behind the slave much later. Pink: "Now, try your best not to cum until we tell you to, alright? You've got a nice cock here, but you may as well be a squiggly if you can't use it right...." Panel 20: Close up of the girls kissing each side of the slave's penis head. Panel 21: Pink is Sucking the slave's cock as Purple is licking the bottom of his shaft. Panel 22: A double paizuri scene wherein the slave's cock is sticking up between Pink and Purple's breasts. Some kiss marks can be seen on the cock and there's some pre-cum rolling down the side of the head, which the girls are looking at. Purple: "Oh, I can feel him getting even harder. Seems like he's a breast guy!" Pink: "Let's do this a bit more an then let him cum. I'm starting to get hungry again!" Panel 23: Similar view except the girls are now tit fucking the slave's cock more aggressively and there's more pre-cum coming out of the cock, some of which has gotten on Pink's tits. Pink: "Alright slave, you can cum, but only a bit. We're going to expect a lot more of these out of you..." Panel 24: Similar view again except now the slave is ejaculating. The load is large, but nothing compared to the huge one in the first chapter. The girls are licking their lips. Panel 25: View from underneath Pink's breasts as she parts them a bit, watching the gooey cum stretch between them. Pink: "Well, it's certainly gotten thicker!" Panel 26: Close up of Pink licking some cum off her finger. She has her eyes closed and looks like she's really savoring it. Pink: "Mmm... Tastes a lot better too." Purple: "Hey, Lilith..." Panel 27: Purple is massaging her breasts with the cum, which is making them appear smoother/shinier and her nipples are more erect. She's blushing and everything else about her face should communicate that what she's doing is very pleasurable. Pink (from outside the panel): "Hmm?" Purple: "Try massaging some into your breasts..." Panel 28: Pink is massaging some cum into her breasts, similar to what Purple was doing in the last panel and is having a similar reaction. Pink: "Oh God, this feels wonderful!" Panel 29: A close up of Pink's vagina, which is dripping wet. Pink: "It's getting me ready to fuck too, but not just yet..." Panel 30: Side view of the girls rubbing their breasts up against one another. Both are still blushing and look to be in a lot of pleasure. Pink is looking toward Purple and Purple is looking toward the slave's face (which I guess means she's facing the viewer, but looking down a bit). Pink: "Let's get some more of this first." Purple: "Alright slave, stand up..." Panel 31: A view similar to the one in the "sideways double paizuri" picture, except it doesn't have to be slanted like that and the slave's penis has yet to slide between their breasts, but the tip of it is poking them a bit. There's some cum on it from the prior ejaculation which was never wiped off. Purple: "Now thrust that pretty penis of yours between our breasts until you're ready to cum on them again..." Panel 32: A similar view to the last except the slave has thrust his cock in. The girls are pleasantly surprised by the vigor with which he's done so. ________________________________________________________________________________ Panel 33: Side view of the girls, parallel to the slave's waist(so the girls are in the foreground and the slave is behind them {see the reference picture called chapter 2 panel 33 if this isn't clear}). The girls are looking at the cock sandwich they made and it should be implied that it's rapidly thrusting in and out (however you like to imply this). Pink: "Wow, he's really going at it!" Panel 34: A view underneath the paizuri showing the slave's balls slapping up against the girl's breasts and some pre-cum dripping down from between their breasts. Purple: "Heh, he's even lubing them up with all that pre-cum of his." Panel 35: Side view of the slave's cock between the girl's tits as if the penis and one of the girl's breasts are being pressed up against a pane of glass. Everything's moist from all the pre-cum and the penis is twitching as the slave's about to cum. Panel 36: Exterior view again, similar to the "sideways double paizuri" picture. Purple is alerted to the fact that the slave's about to cum and is looking down at the action. Pink is looking toward the slave's face. Purple: "Oh! Did you feel that, Lilith?" Pink: "Don't cum yet!" Panel 37: The slave's face looking tense as he resists the urge to cum. Panel 38: The girl's kneeling on the bed, shoulder-to-shoulder, holding their breasts up in front of the slave's cock. Pink: "Here's another test of control for you: make yourself cum in four spurts, one on each of our breasts. Give each of 'em a good load too!" Panel 39: The slave is shooting a load on Purple's right breast (basically the slave's just going to cum on their breasts going from his left to his right). The shot looks somewhat forceful, as if it's being shot from a Super Soaker or something, and most of the breast being cum on is already covered in semen. Panel 39: The slave's face again, he looks even more tense than before as he's trying to regulate his ejaculation so thoroughly. Two "SPLURT" sound effects come from the bottom of the panel, suggesting that he's done another two squirts. Panel 40: Everyone's still in the same position, but Purple now has semen uniformly covering both her breasts whereas Pink has it on her right breast, but the slave is still in the act of cumming on her left one. He's missed a bit, though, and is hitting only the top of her breast and her clavicle. Purple is looking to her left at the cum shot, curious as to what Pink's going to do to him while Pink's yelling at the slave. Pink: "Oh, come on! You can aim better than that, can't you!?" Panel 41: Close up of Pink blowing a kiss, despite being irate in the previous panel she looks very cool and sensual while doing this. A projection of her lips is flying out like a projectile. Panel 42: Side view of the slave's penis as the kiss projectile hits it. The background in this panel is all pink and it's implied the lips are making quite an impact on the penis (however you like to imply this). Panel 43: Same view, but the lips have "popped" with a little "CHU!" sound effect and an explosion of hearts. A pink kissmark is left where it hit and the penis. This has caused the penis to twitch, signifying that the slave's ready to cum again. Panel 44: Pink's face looking stern as she gives the slave another command. Pink: "Now do it right this time!" Panel 45: The slave ejaculating on the last breast without missing. Pink: "There, that's better!" Panel 46: The girls are laying next to each other on the bed with layer of cum still covering each of their breasts (this will go without saying until the slave has massaged it into them). Purple: "Now, you'll be a good boy and help us apply all this "lotion," won't you?" Panel 47: The slave's arm's have suddenly been bound behind his back with an aura similar to the one used to restrict him in the first chapter. Pink (from outside the panel): "With your cock, of course." Panel 48: The slave is kneeling over Purple who's still laying down, relaxing along with Pink who is also still laying down. The slave's massaging Purple's right nipple with the bottom of his penis head and leaning back a bit to try and balance (as his arms are still bound). Purple is blushing and showing signs of pleasure as the slave rubs more of his semen into her skin. Pink is looking over at them and fingering herself (her arm could just be in position if her vagina isn't visible. I'm not sure what view would work best for this). Panel 49: Close up of Purple's breasts. Both her nipples are erect and the general area of her breasts on and around them looks smooth after the semen's been rubbed in. Her underboobs still have cum on them, as well as her cleavage, and the slave's now using the side of his shaft to rub the tops of her breasts (he's since moved over to her side). Panel 50: Side view of Purple's breasts as the slave uses the top of his penis head to massage semen into the bottom of one of her breasts (his penis is perpendicular to her chest). Pink (from outside the panel): "That's right, be sure to get every inch. You'll be a surgeon with that thing by the time we're done with you!" Panel 51: The slave is now rubbing semen into Pink's left nipple after every other part of her breasts have been done. She's blushing , her eyes are closed, and her mouth is open as she cranes her head back in pleasure. Purple is now standing behind the slave, leaning on his shoulders and resting her breasts on top of his head as she looks down in delight at Pink. Purple: "I told you it felt good!" Pink: "Ahh, I could cum like this!" Panel 52: A view from behind the slave. Purple is still behind him and we can see that she's very wet, with juices running down her inner things and down the slave's back. Pink's vagina can be seen as well and it's also very wet, making a small area of the bed moist. Pink: "I think that's all the foreplay I can handle..." Panel 53: A close up of the slave's penis hovering a bit over Pink's breasts, with some trails of gooey cum between it and her cleavage, and his testicles, which are resting on her torso. The balls seem to be pulsating a bit as if they're filling up with more cum. Pink is petting his penis head. Slave (thinking to himself): "It feels different this time... could it be that pill I took?" Pink: "Feels like you're building up a lot in there..." Panel 54: Pink is still laying down, but alarmed and looking angrily at Purple, who has pushed the slave over on his back and his getting into a cowgirl position (facing him) over him. Purple looks excited and the slave looks anxious. Pink: "Hey!" Purple: "What? You had him first last time." Panel 55: A close up of the slave's penis sliding into Purple's vagina. Purple: "Now then..." Panel 56: Slave's POV as he's looking up at Purple, but zoomed in so only her lips and cleavage are showing. Her lips look full and pouty. Purple: "Ready for round two?"
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| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Fri Jun 21, 2013 12:57 pm | |
| Chapter 3: - Spoiler:
Succubus Dungeon New Slave #3 Cover: Not sure yet. ________________________________________________________________________________ Panel 1: Slave's POV. Purple and him are in the same positions as the end of the last chapter, but Pink has gotten up and is kneeling next to purple on the slave's left. She's looking toward the slave, but digging around for something in her purse at the same time. Pink: "Alright buddy, we've been taking it slow so far. Now let's see what you're really made of!" Panel 2: Close up for a heart-shaped stop watch like item in Pink's hand. It has 3 bits of information on it: an orgasm counter for the girls on the upper-left part, denoted with a little heart, an ejaculation counter on the right side, denoted by a little picture of a cumming penis, and a longer field below both of those for time (this doesn't need a label). Pink has just started the timer and a few seconds have gone by. Pink: "Time for a free-for-all fuck fest! This will time you from now until you're all dried up, keep track of how many times you cum, and how many times you can make either of us cum. Afterward it'll score your overall virility." Panel 3: Purple has her hands on the slave's abdomen and is starting to really ride his cock now. Pink has gotten up and is now standing over his face. The timer's just lying on the bed. Pink: "I'd be lying if I said there was a reward for a high score..." Panel 4: Slave's POV as Pink's coming down on his face with her vagina. Pink (mostly off-panel): "But you'll get to fuck us more!" Panel 5: Pink and Purple look as though they're in a lot of pleasure as the slave fucks one and eats out the other. Pink is biting her lip and is squinting while Purple has he eyes closed and her mouth open. Pink: "Of course, you'll be a squiggly if you do poorly..." Purple: "(whatever types of sensual moans/screams you like to use) it's going so deep!" Pink: "I wouldn't worry if I were you, though." Panel 6: Close up of Pink's pelvic region and whatever parts of the slave's face are visible (I'm not sure how big her vagina is relative to his head, is all). The slave looks shocked. It should be implied via sound effects that he's licking away inside her. Panel 7: The slave's muscles are getting tense, making him look stronger, and he's reaching up toward Pink's waist. (whatever angle you want to show this from is fine). Panel 8: The slave is holding Pink's waist, pushing it up against his face as he gives her more aggressive cunnilingus and has thrust up violently into Purple, actually lifting her up for a moment with his pelvis. There's a good deal of vaginal fluid from Purple wherever it would make sense on the slave and around that area of the bed. Likewise Pink seems to be really wet as well. Both girls looked shocked. Purple: "Looks like our natural aphrodisiacs are kicking in!" Panel 9: Pink's grabbed the slave's hands, taken them off her waist (his human strength is still weaker than theirs despite the aphrodisiac invigorating him), and is now pressing them against her breasts. The slave's still giving Pink head and fucking Purple, if you want to have sound effects from either in the panel. Pink: "Give me those!" Panel 10: Purple's leaning back with her breasts up in the air and her head tilted back as the slave continues to fuck her hard. Her face should communicate that she's really being fucked silly (tongue hanging out and squinty? You'd probably know better than me) and both her arms are just kind of dangling behind her (or on the slaves legs or the bed if either makes more sense). Pink has an expression on her face similar to Purple's. Her breasts are being squeezed by the slave and everything from her waist down should seem tense as she's about to cum (if the pose she had before already looked this way then that's fine). Purple: "Lilith, I'm about to cum!" Pink: "Yeah, me too..." Panel 11: All three characters are having massive orgasms. Pink is squirting a bit on the slave's face (so there's some shooting out as she's still pressed up against his mouth) and a lot of semen is blasting out of Purple's vagina, which still has the slave's member in it. Panel 12: Purple, still on the slave's cock, looks relaxed. Sound effects of some sort emanating from her belly suggest that she's "gulping" up the slave's load. The cum that shot out of her in the last panel is all over his torso and the bed. Purple: "Did you know we can feed with our vaginas too?" Panel 13: Pink is licking sperm off the slave's shaft as Purple has just dismounted him, causing some more excess cum to drip out of her. Pink: "I really doubt he can understand you." Panel 14: Slave's POV as he watches Pink lick cum off his cock and Purple start to massage his balls. Due to the strong aphrodisiacs in their vaginal fluids everything in his perspective is a bit blurred except for the girls and there's a pink hue over everything. His heart is pounding hard (whatever sounds you like to use to show this). Pink: "With all that juice he just had he's probably just a mindless fuck-drone at this point." Panel 15: Pink and Purple are to the left and right of the slave's cock, whose balls are facing the viewer (so opposite of the last panel's view). Both girls are looking at it as each massages a testicle of his and Pink strokes his shaft. Pink: "Like a big squiggly with a body..." Panel 16: The girls are in similar positions but the slave is standing up. Purple looks curious while Pink (who's still holding his shaft) looks agitated. Pink: "Hey! Did I tell you to..." Panel 17: The slave has positioned himself behind Pink and lifted her legs up from behind, bringing her pelvic region up to his, but has yet to insert. Purple has stood up as well. Pink is laying on her breasts and turning her head back toward the slave. She has a devious look on her face. Pink: "Oh, getting bold are we?" Panel 18: The slave rams his cock into Pink's vagina causing some of her juices to splash out. Panel 19: The slave is fucking Pink as Purple steps over her body (so she can stand in front of the slave with Pink between her legs). Panel 20: Purple wraps her arms around the slave and starts making out with him. Her breasts are pressed up against his chest. Panel 21: View from behind showing the slave fucking Pink hard. His balls are swinging back and forth and Pink's breasts can be seen pressing against the sheets toward the bottom of the panel. Panel 22: Pink from the front, blushing and gripping the bed sheets as she licks up some cum from before. Panel 23: The slave, who now has some Purple kissmarks on his cheeks and forehead, is sucking on Purple's tit as she pets his head. Purple looks like she's enjoying it. Panel 24: Similar view to the last panel. The slave throws his head back in ecstasy as he cums. Purple has her chest pressed up against his and takes delight in seeing his orgasm face. ________________________________________________________________________________ Panel 25: Another view of the slave and Pink's genitalia as he ejaculates, causing some cum to squirt out of Pink's vagina. Panel 26: Pink is a similar position to panel 22, but looking over her should with an agitated expression on her face. Purple (off panel except for maybe a bit of her ass or legs): "My turn?" Pink: "I haven't cum yet! Get out of the way, Meri!" Panel 27: Pink has pushed herself off the bed, sending the slave falling backward as she remains on his penis. Purple, who is now standing next to them, looks surprised. Panel 28: Pink and the slave have landed in a reverse cowgirl position with a thud causing some of the cum from panel 25 to splash up. Pink: "I'm setting the pace now, and you're going to have to do a lot better than that if you want to satisfy me!" Panel 29: View from above as Pink starts fucking the slave again. She's leaning back a bit, placing her hands on him for support, and has her face turned up so it's facing the viewer. Her eyes are closed and her mouth's open as she indulges in pleasure. Panel 30: A close up of Purple's hands grabbing Pink's breasts (she's reaching around from behind her). Panel 31: A view from the chest upward of Pink with Purple's face visible over her shoulder. Purple is playing with her nipples. Purple looks devious. Pink: "You're just trying to make me cum faster, aren't you." Purple: "Are you saying I should stop?" Panel 32: A view of Pink's face as she goes "HA!". Pink: "Is that a challenge? Ha! Try even harder if you like!" Panel 33: A close up of Pink and the slave's genitalia as she continues to fuck him. There's a good deal of cum and vaginal fluid running down his shaft and balls. Purple's hand can be seen rubbing Pink's clitoris. Pink: "In fact, I'll bet you 2 liters of fresh sperm I can fuck him dry before either of you get me off!" Purple: "You're on!" Panel 34: A view showing all of Pink from the front as she continues to fuck the slave. Purple is licking her neck, playing with one of Pink's breasts, and continuing to finger her clitoris. Cum is shooting out of Pink's vagina as the slave cums again, but it shouldn't look as though him ejaculating is changing her rhythm. Pink's face should indicate she's feeling a lot of pleasure, but concentrating on holding off an orgasm. Panel 35: The slave's sweating, panting, and is starting to look a bit weak/dried out, but not as much so as the spent slave in the first panel of the comic. Two ejaculation sound effects are coming from off panel to indicate that he's still being made to ejaculate. Panel 36: Purple is looking back at the slave, concerned that she may actually lose the bet she just made. Another ejaculation sound can be heard. Purple (thinking to herself): "Crap, Lilith might actually win this. Unless..." Panel 37: With a flash Purple has used her magic to make a stick of white lipstick and a pink packet (same color as the liquid and food mush from the second chapter) with a simple drawing of testicles on it. Panel 38: Purple is pouring a pink powder from that packet onto her tongue. Another ejaculation sound is coming from the side of the panel. Pink (off panel): "What happened, Meri? Your hands getting tired!?" Panel 39: Purple's face is looming over the slave's as she swishes the powder mix around in her mouth, mixing a drink for him with her saliva. The slave looks to be in anguish as he cums yet again. If possible, whatever sound effect you use should make it seem like it was a weaker ejaculation. Panel 40: Purple is French kissing the slave as he swallows the drink she just made for him. Pink (off panel): "Hey! What do you think you're doing!?" Panel 41: Pink (still riding his cock) is looking down at the slave's balls, which are filling up again. There's massive amounts of cum all over Pink's pelvic region, the bed, and whatever parts of the slave are visible. It should look like his balls are laying in a thick puddle of it. Purple (off panel): "You never said I couldn't give him a little help!" Panel 42: View from behind Pink, looking back over her shoulder at Purple and the slave, as she slams down on his cock. She looks mad. Pink: "Damn you! I'll fuck him until his heart goes out if I have to!" Panel 43: Purple has changed position so her face is still looming over the slave's, but she's facing toward Pink now instead of away from her (which is to say she's kneeling on the bed behind his head instead of over his body). Another ejaculation sound can be heard. Despite being in the process of ejaculating the slave is looking anxiously at Purple, wondering what she means. Purple: "Don't worry, I'll make her share long before that happens. Now if you'd h me get this lipstick off..." Panel 44: Purple has her lips pressed tight against the slave's chest as her breasts cover his face. Panel 45: Purple dragging her lips along the slave's chest, leaving a thick smudge of it on him. Panel 46: Pink anxiously looking over her shoulder and grabbing onto the slave's legs, trying to brace herself to take a giant load of cum. The slave's balls look larger and excited (those tick marks you used around his penis on page 5 of the first chapter would be fine). Pink (thinking to herself): "Is she trying to make him shoot hard enough to push me off?" Panel 47: The slave is ejaculating again except with a giant load due to all the lipstick Purple has just left on his chest. Pink just barely manages to keep herself on him and the sheer force of the ejaculation going on inside her nearly makes her cum. Panel 48: Pink has started fucking the slave again and looks ecstatic as she thinks she's spoiled Purple's plan. Pink: "Ha! You almost had me with that one, Meri! But it looks like I'll be winning this after all!" ________________________________________________________________________________ Panel 49: Close up of Purple's lips as she finishes applying the glossy white lipstick she took out earlier. Purple: "What? I just didn't want to waste that lipstick before putting on a new color..." Panel 50: Purple is now face-to-face with Pink, who is looking in shock at the new lipstick. Pink: "Is that pleasure lipstick for succubi? You damn cheater!" Purple: "Hehe, you should have put some rules in place before making the bet..." Panel 51: Purple is passionately kissing Pink on the lips. Pink looks shocked from the sudden rush of pleasure but isn't having an orgasm just yet. Another ejaculation can be heard. Panel 52: Pink's drooling a bit and looks like she's being fucked silly as Purple starts licking semen off her pelvic region. Pink: "I-I won't..." Panel 53: Purple kisses Pink's clitoris, causing her to moan with pleasure. Panel 54: Frontal view of pink. The slave is thrusting up into Pink who looks to be at her limit. Purple is sitting next to her and looks pleased as she watches. Pink: "I won't c-c..." Panel 55: Pink is having an incredibly powerful orgasm. I don't particularly care what angle this is drawn from as long as it gets the point across. Purple used her lipstick dragging to draw a big kiss mark on the slave's chest, though, so please include that if his chest is visible in this panel. Pink: "CUUUUUUUM!" Panel 56: Side view of the slave and Pink, who has fallen backward onto him. Both are panting heavily and the slave has his head turned to the side so he's not just getting a mouth full of Pink's hair. Purple is kneeling beside them, facing the panel. She's feeling the slave's testicles with one hand and reapplying her purple lipstick with the other. She looks pleased. There's cum all over the bed still. Purple: "Well, I can still feel some juice in there, so it looks like you owe me those two liters!" Panel 57: Pink has gotten up, leaving the slave's chest visible and revealing the big kiss mark Purple drew on it earlier. She's looking at the drawing herself, just being able to see it now." Pink: "*Sigh* Yes, I know. I'll give it to you later. Cute, by the way." Purple: "Thanks!" Panel 58: The slave is looking toward his penis, alarmed as Purple (off panel) has started licking it. Purple (off panel): "Anyways, it's my turn now!" Panel 59: Slave's POV as Purple is happily licking some of the excess cum off his shaft. Pink is yelling at her. Pink: "Hey, I was the one who milked all that!" Panel 60: The slave throws his head back in anguish as the two lick his cock all over (all three are visible). Pink: "I have to say, despite you feeding him again earlier it's pretty amazing how thick this still is." Purple: "Yeah, I bet he's got another couple rounds of sex left in him yet..." Panel 61: Purple has mounted the slave in a cowgirl position again. Purple: "Isn't that right, slave?" Panel 62: Purple fucking the slave from whatever angle you like. Panel 63: A large load of cum being shot against a black background. Panel 64: The slave is fucking Pink doggy style. Panel 65: He's fucking Purple missionary style. Panel 66: His cock is between Pink's breasts as he cums on her face. Panel 67: Pink and Purple are on either side of the slave's cock. Purple was about to start sucking it, but Pink has jacked him off and aimed a particularly forceful, super soaker-esque load at her face, forcing her to turn away. She looks agitated and Pink is giggling. Panel 68: The stop watch like time from the beginning of the chapter is laying in a pool of semen. nearly 3 hours have passed, the slave has ejaculated 25 times and the girl orgasm counter shows 6. Multiple ejaculations can be heard coming from off the panel. Panel 69: Pink and Purple are both sliding their vaginas up and down the slave's shaft. A thin, but still impressive by human standards, cum shot has shot up between them, going at least as high as their breasts. Panel 70: The slave looks very exhausted. Several kissing sound effects are coming from off the panel, in whatever direction his cock and the girls would be. Slave: "Please..." Panel 71: The girls look displeased by the fact the fact that he's speaking. His penis can be seen throbbing between them and it's now covered in Pink and Purple kiss marks. Pink: "Please what? Stop!? Don't be ridiculous! I know you still have some cum left in there for us!" Purple: "Maybe he meant 'Please kiss me more' so he can get all those annoying thoughts out of his head..." Panel 72: Pink and Purple have their eyes closed and their lips puckered as they move in to kiss the slave's cock more. ________________________________________________________________________________ Panel 73: Both girls are interrupted as a wave of drowsiness comes over them. Purple: "Hey Lilith, are you suddenly..." Pink: "Yeah, what's going..." Panel 74: View from above as both girls have fallen asleep. That slave is still laying on his back in a state of disbelief.
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| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Fri Jun 21, 2013 12:58 pm | |
| Chapter 4: - Spoiler:
Succubus Dungeon New Slave #4 Cover: Not sure yet
Panel 1: The slave is sitting up, looking at the sleeping girls. As in most of the last chapter the bed is absolutely drenched with, all three of them may as well be laying in puddles of it. Slave: "Is this what that pill was for? Ungh, why did it have to take so long? Well, I had better figure out something fast..." Panel 2: The slave is digging around in that purse Pink had at the beginning of the last chapter. Slave: "Are the cell keys in here?" Panel 3: The slave is holding a white napkin with pink hearts on it he found in the bag. Slave: "Damn, no keys, but I may be able to use this to clean off..." Panel 4: The slave's standing up now, no longer on the bed. His face, chest, and balls have been cleaned off and he's just finishing up wiping off his penis. He's looking down at something on the floor to his left. Panel 5: One of the girl's set of cell keys is just laying on the floor next to the bed. It has a large key ring with a heart on it exactly like the one on the slave's collar. The keys are all penis shaped. Slave (off panel): "Really?" Panel 6: The slave is holding the keys and shocked to find that both the heart on the key ring and the one around his neck are suddenly blinking and making beeping sounds. Slave: "Oh no, I should have known this charm had something to do with my collar! I need to get out of here now!" Panel 7. After having opened it, the slave is standing on the other side of the door to the room he was in for the last 2 chapters. He's looking around frantically. His collar and the keys (if you include them in the panel) are still blinking. Slave (thinking to himself): "I can't just leave my master, though! Or that guy who helped me out... Ah, there he is!" Panel 8: The other sperm slave (from chapter 2) is surprised to see the slave (doesn't have to be visible in the panel) outside of his cell. Slave: "Hey, do you know if there's any way to turn a squiggly back to normal!? I have to find my master!" Other Slave: "Y-yes, there is. I've seen it happen once before..." Panel 9: Red (topless) is at the other end of the corridor, talking into a heart-shaped communication device on her wrist. Red: "Blue, I think I've just found the culprit!" Panel 10: Having never seen a greater succubus before, the slave is especially shocked to see Red at the end of the hallway and drops the keys, but still has the napkin in his other hand. Panel 11: Red blows a magic kiss, similar to the one Pink used in the second chapter. Panel 12: The kiss projectile is making contact with the slave's penis, causing little hearts to fly to fly off with the impact. His penis is getting tense, as if he's about to cum, and an excessive amount of pre-cum is coming off the tip. Panel 13: The slave is frantically cleaning the kiss mark off his penis before it takes full effect. Panel 14: Red looks amused. Red: "Oh? Clever, are we?" Panel 15: Close up of Red's face as she blows more kisses. The panel shows her in one seductive kiss blowing pose, but several kiss projectiles are flying off her lips. Panel 16: The slave has one hand covering the head of his penis and is frantically waving the napkin around with the other to block the projectiles. Panel 17: As that continues Blue (also topless) teleports in behind him and looks amused by his struggle. Panel 18: The slave starts turning around to run, but hasn't taken his eyes off Red. He doesn't notice the Blue is right behind him. Panel 19: The slave has run face-first into Blue's cleavage and has become docile from being in there, standing still with only his hair sticking up above her breasts a bit and his penis poking out between her legs. Panel 20: Red and Blue are now standing bust-to-bust with the slave's head remaining in their cleavage. They're both looking down at him. Red: "Well, that was over quckly." Blue: "Hehe, glad I could help?" Panel 21: Close up of the slave's face, which is still buried in Blue's cleavage. He looks dazed and an aroma can be seen going past his nostrils. Slave (thinking to himself): "They're not forcing me to stay in here, and yet I... This odor... I have to get..." Panel 22: The slave looks more out-of-it than before. His eyes are closed, his mouth is hanging open, the pheromones can be seen swirling around him. Slave (thinking to himself): "I have to..." _____________________________________________________________________________ Panel 23: Similar to the last panel except the slave has started to drool a bit and the thought bubble he had before is now filled with tits. The edges of this panel are hazy and, instead of darkness or flesh (whatever you had around his head in the last two panels), the backdrop is a collage of hearts, kiss marks, and different colored puckered lips, reflecting his thoughts in the moment as the pheromones overwhelm him. Panel 24: The slave (in the exact same position as panel 19) is ejaculating with a large load that flies several meters forward (the length of it can just be assumed if a panel that wide wouldn't work). Red looks impressed by the shot. Red: "Wow, kid's got a nice shot!" Panel 25: Blue is holding the salve, who's now unconscious, in her left arm and has some of his semen between her fingers in her right hand, which she's looking at, examining its consistency and such. Blue: "Is this that guy Meri and Lilith were talking about?" Red (off panel): "I think so. Let's bring him back to their room and see what they want done with him." Panel 26: The slave is shackled to a wall similar to the cover of chapter 1. He looks a bit confused as he's just waking up. Purple (off panel): "You know, I'm impressed he was able to think about anything but sex." Pink (off panel): "No kidding, last time this happened the slave just fucked us in our sleep until he passed out..." Panel 27: Slave's POV. Pink is standing to his left and has a stern look on her face while Purple, standing to his right, has a large glass container of the semen she won from Pink and is merrily drinking from it with a straw. Both girls are clothed again. Pink: "Enjoy your nap? We certainly weren't expecting ours..." Panel 28: The bed they were all on chapter 3 can be seen along with at least one of the walls in the room (so maybe use a side or isometric view instead of an above one?). It's still absolutely drenched with cum, to the point where there's more of it visible than the bed sheets. Some cum can also be seen on the walls, implying they had him ejaculating all over the place. Pink (off panel): "Now, fortunately for us your seed was only mildly contaminated with a drug made for human targets, which is why we got to have so much fun before it kicked in. That still leaves all of this inedible, though, which is simply unacceptable! I was tempted to turn you into a squiggly, but decided to give you a second chance since you scored so well in our test earlier." Panel 29: The slave looks nervous as Pink, who's face is now within inches of his, looks him right in the eyes and puts her hand around the back of his head. Pink: "But, before that, I'd like to know where you got that drug from since you've never been in the lab." Slave: "I can't re..." Panel 30: Pink is kissing the slave on the slave on the lips. The slave looks shocked. Panel 31: Similar view to 29 except the slave looks dazed and has a kiss mark on his lips. Pink: "Tell me where you got the drug." Slave: "The man 2 cells down from my own gave it to me." Pink: "So that's why you were trying to free him... Meri, tell Red and Blue to pay that one a visit." Panel 32: The other slave is in his cell, partially laying on the floor, but with his back up against the wall as if he had stumbled backward and crawled back a bit afterward (basically I jsut don'w want him standing so the girls can look even taller in the next panel). He looks frightened. Red and Blue's shadows are looming over him. Red (off panel): "Meri just told us you've been a very bad boy..." Other slave: "What are you going to do to me?" Panel 33: Other slave's POV as Red and Blue (clothed now) loom over him. They're both grinning and look kind of playful. Blue: "Oh, just a little 'reeducation'." Panel 34: Holding him by his arm pits, Red is lifting the other slave up from behind, just high enough so his feet aren't touching the ground (his feet don't have to be in the panel, I just don't want her lifting him up very high) and bringing the back of his head in toward her breasts. Blue is standing in front of him, petting the head of his penis and looking at it. Blue: "Some extra attention to get you thinking with this head again instead of that naughty one up there..." Panel 35: The other slave's head has been placed between Red's breasts. Her bra is still on and the elastic straps of it are binding his wrists, keeping his hands in the cups of her bra with his palms against her flesh. Red is re-fastening her belt so it fits around both of them, fitting just above the other slave's penis and whatever part of her back that area would meet up with. The other slave's legs are sticking out straight with shock and his cock looks like it's about to explode. Red: "I'll give you a lift back to our chambers. Try not to make a mess!" Blue (off panel): "I just hope he doesn't dry up before we get there." Panel 36: The other slave is ejaculating as the girls (with Blue leading them) walk down the hallway (don't need to show any cells if you don't want to. it could be a bare stretch of wall or something.) Since Blue was walking ahead of Red and him, the cum shot's hitting her back. Blue looks annoyed and red is amused. Panel 37: Back in Pink and Purple's room. Pink is showing a syringe to the slave (he's still bound). Pink doesn't have to be on panel aside from her hand holding the syringe. Pink: "Now, I could inject you with this antidote to nullify the drug and start our feeding session over, but would you really learn anything from that?" Panel 38: Pink it taking the cap off a tube of black lipstick. Pink: "I doubt it. I said I'd give you another chance, but you have to prove you're worth it first..." Panel 39: Pink is applying the black lipstick and Purple, taking a momentary break from her cum drinking, looks shocked to see her doing so. Purple: "You're not going to use that on him, are you!?" Panel 40: Pink is holding the slave's shaft up as she kisses one of his testicles. Panel 41: A view of the slave from the chest up. Pounding sound effects indicate his heart is going nuts and he looks very tense/shocked, beyond any sensation from a kiss he's gotten yet. Kissing sound effects are coming from the bottom of the panel. Panel 42: The slave's cock and balls are now covered with black kiss marks. His balls are expanding and his penis has gotten larger and veiny. So much pre-cum is coming off of it that it's running down his shaft and balls and is dripping off of him. Pink (off panel): "I've just given you an older, much stronger version of our typical lipstick." Panel 43: A black, generic male silhouette with a white penis. Red arrows from every end of its body are all converging on the penis. This panel just serves as a really simple of diagram of what Pink's saying, implying that every bit of vitality he has is being forced into his penis. Pink (off panel): " Unlike what we've given you so far, which simply encourages your body to turn excess nutrients into semen, this one is already putting absolutely everything you have into it." Panel 44: Flashback sequence of a succubus on a skeleton in the cowgirl position in a big puddle of semen. Pink (off panel): "This lipstick gave us our reputation as killers..." Panel 45: Pink is strapping a mouthpiece onto the slave with a tube in it to give him food. Pink: "You might not die, though, if you remain focused and keep eating." Panel 46: A black metal tube with a pair of silicone lips on end (kind of like a fleshlight) is being slid onto the slave's penis. This device also has a tube coming off the other end of it. Pink: "This is going to make you come over, and over, and over again until all the drugged fluids in your body right now are sucked out through your dick hole. so you'll never forget a single drop of what you've wasted here today." ________________________________________________________________________________ Panel 47: A zoomed out view of the slave with his mouth and milking apparatus on. In this panel we can see that the mouth piece leads to a big glass container of that pink fluid from before while the milking one leads to an empty container waiting to be filled with cum. Both containers are a bit larger than the slave himself. Pink (off panel): "As I said, though, you might survive if you replenish off that food, but only if you hold off on ejaculating long enough to digest any of it." Panel 48: Purple is still sucking away at her cum straw, but seems a bit concerned as she looks at the slave (off panel). Whichever hand isn't holding the container of semen is casting a spell which has just teleported the giant squiggly (clean this time) into the room and Pink is approaching it. Pink: "And since I'm still hungry I'll give you something to aspire to!" Panel 50: The other slave is suspended in the center of Red and Blue's room by chains, being held up in an X shaped. Red is in front of him and Blue is behind him and they're both rubbing their breasts up and down is body. The slave looks completely out of it and there's cum all over his body and the girl's breasts, suggesting that they just keep rubbing him as he cums on them. Panel 51: Back in Pink and Purple's room the slave can be seen desperately feeding off his mouth tube as semen gets shot through the one leading off his penis. Several ejaculation noises and a sucking sound are coming off it. Panel 52: Pink (with her regular lipstick on again) has wrapped herself around the giant squiggly and is kissing its head. It has several pink kissmarks there already and is trembling a little as it gets excited. Ejaculation noises are coming from the slave's location. Panel 53: The other slave is now covered with red and blue kissmarks as they give him double paizuri. He's starting to look dried up, but has a glowing expression on his face as he loses his awareness on account of the pheromones. All 3 characters have cum all over them. Panel 55: Purple is now kissing the giant squiggly as Pink (who's now taken off her top and panies) rubs her whole body up and down its shaft. Along with the head, its shaft and balls are now covered with pink and purple kiss marks as well. It looks like it's close to ejaculating. Panel 56: The slave tilts his head up and closes his eyes as he has yet another orgasm. Panel 57: The giant squiggly is erupting with an ejaculation exponentially larger the slave has done so far and with the force of a fire hose. Pink and Purple are on either side of it, holding their mouths open as some of that cum starts to rain down on them. Panel 58: Red and Blue are standing on either side of the other slave, who looks dried up, but still has an expression of ignorant bliss/retardation on his face. There are thick lines of cum running from one girls breasts to the other and they both looks pleased. Red: "Heh, I bet he'll behave now!"
Panel 60: The slave has passed out and the machines have stopped. His food container is completely empty and his cum one is full. There are bits of cum everywhere from the giant squiggly's ejaculation still, some on the slave as well.
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| | | handsomered
Posts : 70 Join date : 2013-02-05
| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Fri Jun 21, 2013 1:00 pm | |
| About half of Chapter 5: - Spoiler:
Succubus Dungeon New Slave #5 Cover: Not sure yet Panel 1: The slave is unconscious, but rock hard, and bound to a hospital bed with pink sheets. His head is resting on a heart-shaped pillow. He has an IV going into one of his arms and one on each testicle, all of which have the familiar pink fluid going through their tubes. The succubus nurse is measuring the length of his penis. Nurse: "Well, length and girth seem normal..." Panel 2: The nurse has wrapped a blood pressure checker around the slave's shaft and is squeezing the rubber bulb that pumps air into it. It's gotten quite tight. Nurse: "Let's see about that blood pressure..." Panel 3: The slave is rudely awoken by the sensation of having his cock squeezed so tightly. Nurse (off panel): "Also normal!" Panel 4: The nurse has a syringe in one hand, full of a small amount of blue liquid, and is holding the slave's balls up with her other hand. She's looking toward the slave's face, having just noticed he's up. Nurse: "Ah, I see you're finally up! You've been out for nearly 2 weeks now. You should be proud to know, though, that this guy perked back up almost immediately after you were brought in." Panel 5: A male urine bottle (the kind with the tilted head so you can use it while laying down) half full of semen is sitting on the nurse's supply table. Some of her lipstick can be seen on the rim of it, suggesting that she's been drinking it. Nurse: "And with all these nocturnal emissions you've been having, it's like you were never out of service!" Panel 6: The nurse is injecting that blue liquid into the slave's perineum (aka gooch, or that area between the testes and anus). However you want to show this is up to you. Nurse: "Now, don't be alarmed, I'm going to make you go flaccid for a bit..." Panel 7: The nurse is doing a really sexy pose. Nurse: "Now look at me." Panel 8: The slave's penis is becoming erect again. It should look maybe 50-70% of its typical erect state. Nurse: "Great! Just had to be sure you could still do it naturally." Panel 9: The nurse has just blown a magic kiss at the slave's penis, which has connected, causing his dick to spring back to 100% in an instant. Nurse: "Alright, enough of that." Panel 10: Pink and Purple enter the medical room. Purple is looking toward the doctor while Pink is excitedly looking toward the slave (neither the slave or the nurse have to be visible.) Purple: "Hello doctor!" Pink: "Hey Meri, look, he's up!" ________________________________________________________________________________ Panel 11: Pink and Purple are looking at the slave's penis, which now has some pre-cum at its tip. They look eager to feed off it again since they've had nothing but squiggly cum for the past two weeks. Nurse: "Heh, looks like you really missed him. He just woke up a little while ago, actually, and seems like he's fit for service again." Panel 12: The Nurse is talking to Pink and Purple, both of whom are now giving her their attention as opposed to the slave's penis. Nurse: "You know, this slave of yours has some really high grade stuff building up in there, and the competition's coming up soon..." Panel 13: Pink is looking back in the direction of the slave. Pink: "You think he's breeder material?" Nurse (off panel): "He's got a better shot than any of the other ones I've tested recently." Panel 14: Purple is talking to Pink. Purple: "You know our access to him would be limited if he won, though. Not to mention what could happen if he lost..." Pink: "I know... I'm not about to turn up a potential favor from the queen, though." Purple: "You do have a point." Panel 15: Pink and Purple are on either side of the slave, holding him up with their shoulders (since he hasn't walked in quite awhile). He now has a Pink kiss mark on one cheek and a Purple one on the other. Both: "Thanks Doc!" Nurse: "No problem, girls. Just go a bit easier on him next time, alright?" Panel 16: Purple is nude, laying on her back, and Pink (also nude) is laying on top of her. Their breasts are pressed together and the slave can be seen behind them, currently fucking Pink (the idea being that he's just switching from one vagina to another). He has a few kiss marks on whatever parts of him are visible. Slave (thinking to himself/exposition): "That night the girls nearly fucked me to death again..." Panel 17: Pink and Purple are giving the slave double paizuri and he's ejaculating. Both the girls look like they're arguing with each other all the while. Slave (thinking to himself/exposition): "All the while debating whether or not I should be entered in something called 'the competition', which they wouldn't explain, of course, as I had no say in the matter." Panel 18: Pink, Purple, and the slave are standing in front of a large pair of doors. They have a pair of giant stone penises on them (similar to the door in the first chapter), which are crossed, as if they're swords about to duel. Slave (thinking to himself/exposition): "I'm guessing Lilith won the argument since they took me to a new, deeper part of the dungeon afterward..." Panel 19: The slave is looking nervously at the door. Pink and Purple are talking to him, indifferent to his anxiety. Purple: "I'm afraid this is good bye for now." Pink: "We're leaving you with a new trainer, one who can make a real champ out of you." Panel 20: Pink and Purple are kissing the slave on the cheeks. Panel 21: The girls look back and wave as they walk off. Purple: "We'll be back for you in 3 months." Pink: "And I want you back in one piece when that day comes, alright!?" Panel 22: The slave (who has the kiss marks on his cheeks, if they're visible) looks frightened as the door starts to open. Panel 23: The trainer is looking at the slave's cock and looks neither disappointed or impressed, she's simply sizing him up. Trainer: "I take it you're Lilith and Meri's slave. Come with me..." Panel 24: The slave is following his trainer. Various restraints and bondadge geat can be seen in the background. Trainer: "Did your owners tell you why you're here?" Slave: "Something about a competition?"
And stuff I have yet to write out: - The trainer explains the competition and what it takes to win. She also makes it clear that he could die if he fails, giving him incentive to win since fathering a generation of succubi doesn't appeal to the slave in its own right. Training (all of these sequences are brief as the slave recalls them): - Trainer tasks him with staying hard for a long time with no pheromones, kisses, drugged food, masturbation, etc. lest he be turned into a squiggly. He has a cock ring that release the squiggly gas if it doesn't detect a certain amount of pressure being exerted on its interior and his wrists are fitted with devices that will set the ring off if they come close to it, meaning he can't touch himself. Despite the lack of stimuli he's also expected to fill a bucket of cum every day. - The slave learns how to make himself ejaculate with convulsions and strong mental focus and manages to fill his subconscious with so much eroticism that he'll maintain an erection while sleeping. - ^ During all this time the slave only ever sees the trainer when she comes to take the cum bucket in exchange for food (she won't feed him unless the bucket is full) since seeing her anym ore regularly would make it easier for him to stay hard, compromising the test. - After he has proven himself able to hold an erection indefinitely and cum on command, much more intensive training starts. The slave is seen shooting targets and being taught to more thoroughly control the size of his loads. He is also seen performing incredible acts of strength with his penis, such as jumping with it, like a pogo stick, while the trainer sits on his back (might make a good cover?). - Whenever the slave isn't training he's bound to an apparatus that jelqs him (a penis exercise I'll give a reference for later). - Finally the trainer is seen telling the slave that his training is complete after he's able to satisfy her in bed without passing out or going dry. - The chapter ends with the slave standing over Pink and Purple, who are passed out in a big pool of his cum, as he checks that stopwatch ting from before, noting his dramatically improved virility. Chapter 6 Cover: Not sure yet - The next chapter opens with Pink and Purple bringing the slave to the competition (I still haven't thought of a good name for this yet) and telling him that it started a little while ago, with every man failing so far. - At the gates to the first room of the trials the slave meets the queen for the first time. She tells him a bit more about the competition and then makes him drink some of her vaginal fluids, giving him even more erotic energy. There are 4 trials he has to complete: Trial 1: The slave simply has to reach the door at the end of the room. He isn't told this, however, until after he has inserted himself in the first succubi and finds that he can't pull out due to a great suction force. The slave concludes that he has to cum in her with a load massive enough to force her vagina open, and eventually does so Trial 2: Red and Blue are in the next room and the slave is tasked with making them both cum. The twist, though, is that he's bound by their elastic bra straps and can barely move (I'll give detailed references as to how he's bound later). He manages to get semen on both their breasts, though, and rubs it in with what few parts of his body he can move, causing them to cum from his cum's topical effects, as seen in chapter 2, which has only gotten stronger now. Trial 3: The next room has a massive harem of succubi who swarm the slave. He's expected to make all of them cum, but things are seeming bleak as the chapter ends with him buried under a pile of them. Chapter 7 Cover: Not sure yet - The chapter opens with a greater succubi and some of her assistants capturing an entire village full of men. The men are initially standing in a crowd, naked, erect, and compliant (due to pheromones) as the succubus explains their new role in life. Their wives, daughters, etc. have all been drugged and are fast asleep. - She then has the men form lines based on their penis sizes, the least of which are being turned into squigglies as the others walk single-file into one of a couple of large cages (on wagons or something). - While that is happening an angelic woman appears and tells the succubi that they've gone too far this time. Meanwhile, back in the dungeon, the slave is still undergoing the third trial. It seems like he's taken a bit more control of the situation, but is still a bit desperate and is starting to get exhausted. He does eventually prevail, though, and is pleased to find a rang to clean himself (the succubi in the last room kissed him a lot) and some of that pink fluid to help regain some strength. - ^ At some point during this trial Pink and Purple can be seen watching from the audience and sucking off some squigglies as a snack. Trial 4: The last room merely contains the queen sitting on her throne. The slave has to make it to the end of the room and simply touch her, but this proves difficult as the queen's incredibly powerful pheromones and blown kisses make it difficult to move or do much of anything without having massive orgasms. By the end he barely manages to crawl over to her and touch her foot, but it counts. - The queen applies a glossy golden lipstick and kisses the head of the slave's penis with it. This lipstick permanently "supercharges" the slave with erotic energy, making his penis grow a bit, his testicles expand more as his sperm cells become larger, and making him much more virile all around. The queen asks him to fuck her right there and he's now able to despite having no energy left before. - That angel appears in the dungeon and says she's banishing all of them back to their own dimension. Red and Blue attack her but she's able to effortlessly immobilize them and cast them into a portal. She then sends out a magic wave that turns all the squigglies back into humans, including the hero, who Pink was coincidentally sucking on. - Knowing that the angel is far too powerful for any of them, the queen tells her succubi to retreat and they all go back to their own dimension. Pink and Purple seem determined to find their way back to the human world again one day, though, and have the slave to themselves (not knowing where he'll end up). - As the slaves and former squigglies are all trying to find clothes and leave the dungeon the angel notices the golden kissmark on the slave and takes note of his "assets." She asks him if he'd like to join her in their world and he finds himself unable to refuse as he's completely infatuated with her. - The hero wonders how much of a choice his former apprentice really had in the matter and the comic ends with the slave ejaculating on a bunch of angels as the one from before explains that their magical abilities are also cum-based, but they don't have to live off it like the succubi. The slave notices that not a whole lot has changed, but the angles are much gentler with him. | |
| | | handsomered
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| Subject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine Fri Jun 21, 2013 1:03 pm | |
| Looks like the forum messed up some formatting, but I think it's all still readable? I just feel weird about throwing the word file up somewhere before it's all finished. | |
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