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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptySat Mar 16, 2013 11:49 pm

Oh wow, that's amazing! And beyond the cover there will be a comic? Fantastic Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptySun Mar 17, 2013 12:25 am

yeah, the cover was actually free, lol.
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptySun Mar 31, 2013 6:54 am

VanuLove's HDD died, but I got a page from Vanja this morning.

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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyWed Apr 17, 2013 2:03 pm

Another page from Vanja's comic:

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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyWed Apr 17, 2013 7:33 pm

They should run... very fast! B3 * would accually be the one that is all " Oh hai, ladies! O///w///O " in that situation* =w=
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PostSubject: this looks so promising   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyTue Apr 23, 2013 9:01 pm

wolfzero001 wrote:
They should run... very fast! B3 * would accually be the one that is all " Oh hai, ladies! O///w///O " in that situation* =w=
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyThu May 02, 2013 6:35 am

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The kiss looks a little weird, but I'm not feeling too picky on this one. This makes my first commission halfway done (she does 24 panels per commission) then I'm going to commission her again to finish the chapter. I'll probably wrtie a script for chapter 2 soon as well with a lot more actual sex than this one.
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyThu May 02, 2013 3:38 pm

speaking of kisses....you forgot to try and get your commission slot from Jackurai!
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyThu May 02, 2013 4:06 pm

I actually messaged him, but I was out and couldn't send him a script fast enough. Been having trouble deciding what I really want for a 3rd part. I might just make up a new premise and send it to him for next time
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptySat May 11, 2013 9:18 am

I've finally gotten more page previews from VanuLove. I made some minor change requests (kiss marks in the first two panels and more cum on the last page), but this is pretty much how it will look:

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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyThu May 16, 2013 6:41 pm

Vanja sent me 2 more pages today:

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^ With this I've got 18 of the 40 panels in the Chapter 1 script I sent her.

I've also been working on a panel-by-panel script for the future chapters of this I'd like and sent Vanja this outline for approval:

Quote :
I'm not 100% sure of this yet, but I was thinking the series would go something like:

Chapter 1: What I've given you so far.

Chapter 2 (with a different cover than I originally had in mind which I'll describe in the updated script): After being left in his cell for awhile, which is regularly misted with succubus pheromones, and being fed food rich in aphrodisiacs and special medications designed to make his sperm more nutritious and improve his sexual performance, the slave is brought out again to see how well these aforementioned treatments have taken effect. On his way to the girls' bedroom, though, another slave sneaks a pill into his hand which the protagonist takes figuring he hasn't much to loose. The girls start him off with some paizuri and find that his improved semen feels amazing when massaged into their breasts. They have him tit fuck them more, carefully cum on each of their breasts, and then bind his arms and make him use his cock to massage it into their skin. Just as the slave's testicles start to feel funny from the pill taking effect, the girls decide it's time to really get down and dirty.

Chapter 3: More conventional sex during which the slave cums several times. As he's starting to feel worn out the girls insist that they're just getting started, but pass out due to the slave's semen being drugged by the pill (unfortunately for him the drug wasn't particularly potent or fast-acting). As his free will starts to return the slave stumbles off the bed (he can barely walk at this point) and manages to find a set of cell keys which he intends to you to free the slave who helped him and possibly his former master. After holding the keys for a moment, though, the heart gem on his collar and a similar contraption on the key ring start beeping and blinking, alerting the two "greater succubi" (larger and with visible wings and tails) who act as guards to come and investigate. The slave hurries (best he can) toward the bedroom door only to find one of the guards on the other side of it. As he turns around the second one teleports in behind him and he runs face-first into her breasts (she's tall enough for his face to meet up with them perfectly). The two of them sandwich his head between their breasts and he's overpowered by their strong pheromones, causing him to cum rather violently and pass out.

The slave wakes up bound to a wall (similar to the first chapter's cover) confronted by Lilith a Meri who are very disappointed in him, but also impressed he was able to recover his free will so quickly when most slaves wouldn't have been able to think of anything but sex for days after what he had been through. After giving him a kiss which makes him incapable of lying one of the girls asks who had given him that pill. The culprit is then seen being smothered by the guards until the pheromones break his will. The girls could give the slave an antidote but decide to punish him by giving him a kiss that causes most of his bodily fluids to rapidly go into sperm production (much more so than usual) and is hooked up to something (I'm not sure exactly what yet) that will milk him until there's no trace of the drug left in his system. If he survives, the slave is told, he might be "breeder material." The chapter ends with the slave being milked relentlessly as the girls satisfy their hunger with the giant squiggly (which is brought into the room so the slave can watch).

^ I should probably break that up a bit, but I'm not sure where yet...

Chapter 4: After being unconscious for a few days the slave wakes up in a hospital bed as a succubi nurse is inspecting his cock. Since he survived his punishment in the last chapter and the nurse deems his cock and balls fit for service again, Lilith and Merri enter him as a contestant in the Sperm Slave Olympics their queen organizes every couple of years, the winner of which is declared "king" and allowed to impregnate the queen and any others who want daughters. The absolute looser is turned into a squiggly giving the slaves added incentive to do their best. Each competing slave is given some of the queen's vaginal fluid to drink which sends them into a sexual frenzy. They are then released in separate obstacle courses filled with succubi who try to wear them out with sex and break their will to compete with kisses. The first to finish the course is given a large point bonus, but points are also earned by making succubi cum and a certain amount is added to a slave's score for every mL of semen produced (the succubi collect it all afterward). Watching from the audience, Lilith and Meri are torn as to whether or not they actually want him to win or place above last so he remains human and they can still keep him for themselves. Another slave reaches the end of his course first, but the chapter ends with some uncertainty as to whether or not he won since the protagonist has been making more succubi cum and firing larger loads into them.

Chapter 5: As the contest is going on back in the castle, two greater succubi have decided to capture a full village full of men. The chapter begins with the men standing naked, erect, and dazed from the pheromones and kisses in front of a stage the greater succubi are standing on. They tell the crowd their new purpose and life and then ask them to form lines based on their penis sizes. The well-endowed men are seen lining up to be kissed, collared, and then led into one of several barred carriages. As the others are about to become squigglies, though, a sexy, female, angel-like figure appears and tells the succubi they've gone too far this time.

Meanwhile, back at the castle, the protagonist has just barely scored high enough to win the Sperm Slave Olympics and receives a kiss from the queen, leaving a permanent golden kissmark on the head of his penis which, not only represents a crown of sorts, but raises his sexual prowess even more. As he's about to fuck the queen, though, the angel from before barges in and says she's going to send all the succubi back to their own dimension. After doing so (she's much more powerful than any of them), she turns all the squigglies back to normal and restores the rest of the slaves to more normal states. As she approaches the protagonist, though, she's impressed by his "assets" and the fact that he won the golden kissmark. She offers to return him to normal the best she can (the golden kiss can't be removed) or take him with her to their sky kingdom where they are in need of his special "talents." Being completely infatuated with her, the slave agrees to the later as the hero watches and wonders how much choice in the matter he actually has. The series ends with the former-slave showering a group of angels in cum as the one from before explains that, while the angels don't need to feed on semen to survive, their magical powers and ability to fight off demons like the succubi are greatly enhanced by it. She kisses the protagonist on the cheek and he wonders if much has really changed.
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyThu Jun 06, 2013 10:07 am

Changed the title of the thread since it's more about my stuff from Vanja than VanuLove.

Also,

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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptySat Jun 08, 2013 8:18 am

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^ That's the last page of my first commission from Vanja. Everything seen here so far was $125, which seems like a good deal to me!
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptySun Jun 09, 2013 12:15 am

All wonderful stuff! Thank you so much for your contributions. By the way, is there any more to the black and white commission there? I'm rather curious; the artist's style is really good, and I'd love to see more of it.
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptySun Jun 09, 2013 5:34 am

Those are only rough sketches of what will eventually be a full color comic. The artist is just really dragging ass with it :/ .
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptySun Jun 09, 2013 9:03 pm

Ok, just thought I'd ask Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyTue Jun 18, 2013 7:13 am

I've written about 38 pages (in Word, dunno what that will translate to in the comic >_>) of the script for Succubus Dungeon so far, leaving me just at the end of what I originally thought would be chapter 3; I ended up dividing it into two chapters in order to make the erotic sequences more elaborate, so now I'm at the beginning of chapter 5. 

At this point I want to say I've written about 2/3rds of it, but I'm really not sure as everything tends to get longer as I start getting into it.  Assuming Vanja keeps accepting my commissions (I pay her for 24 panels at a time), this could be going on for 1.5 to 2 years >_>

Anyways, I plan on combing through the script real quick for errors and then sharing it here later.  Suggestions are welcome, but understand that I'm still the one paying for this and have very particular fetishes.
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyTue Jun 18, 2013 10:21 am

damn your really putting that work into this. gj and can't wait
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyFri Jun 21, 2013 12:55 pm

Well, here's what I've got so far...

As I hadn't settled on character names while writing much of this, characters are just referred to by either their lipstick colors or roles in the story.  I'll be giving Vanja references for newer characters as their commissions actually come up, but haven't decided on exact appearances as of now since it will be awhile before they are relevant anyways.

Just understand that Red, Blue, the queen, and the other "greater succubus" are all a bit taller and larger than the girls seen so far, and that Red and Blue have very strong elastic bra/panty straps (relevant to a few panels later on). 

Obviously this could stand to be proofread further and probably stream-lined a bit, but it should give anyone interested a decent idea as to what's going to happen:

Chapter 1 (most of which is already done and posted here):

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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyFri Jun 21, 2013 12:56 pm

Chapter 2:

Spoiler:
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Chapter 3:

Spoiler:
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyFri Jun 21, 2013 12:58 pm

Chapter 4:

Spoiler:
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyFri Jun 21, 2013 1:00 pm

About half of Chapter 5:

Spoiler:

And stuff I have yet to write out:



- The trainer explains the competition and what it takes to win.  She also makes it clear that he could die if he fails, giving him incentive to win since fathering a generation of succubi doesn't appeal to the slave in its own right.
Training (all of these sequences are brief as the slave recalls them):
- Trainer tasks him with staying hard for a long time with no pheromones, kisses, drugged food, masturbation, etc. lest he be turned into a squiggly.  He has a cock ring that release the squiggly gas if it doesn't detect a certain amount of pressure being exerted on its interior and his wrists are fitted with devices that will set the ring off if they come close to it, meaning he can't touch himself.  Despite the lack of stimuli he's also expected to fill a bucket of cum every day. 
- The slave learns how to make himself ejaculate with convulsions and strong mental focus and manages to fill his subconscious with so much eroticism that he'll maintain an erection while sleeping.
- ^ During all this time the slave only ever sees the trainer when she comes to take the cum bucket in exchange for food (she won't feed him unless the bucket is full) since seeing her anym ore regularly would make it easier for him to stay hard, compromising the test.
- After he has proven himself able to hold an erection indefinitely and cum on command, much more intensive training starts.  The slave is seen shooting targets and being taught to more thoroughly control the size of his loads.  He is also seen performing incredible acts of strength with his penis, such as jumping with it, like a pogo stick, while the trainer sits on his back (might make a good cover?).
- Whenever the slave isn't training he's bound to an apparatus that jelqs him (a penis exercise I'll give a reference for later).
- Finally the trainer is seen telling the slave that his training is complete after he's able to satisfy her in bed without passing out or going dry.
- The chapter ends with the slave standing over Pink and Purple, who are passed out in a big pool of his cum, as he checks that stopwatch ting from before, noting his dramatically improved virility.
 
Chapter 6
Cover: Not sure yet
 
- The next chapter opens with Pink and Purple bringing the slave to the competition (I still haven't thought of a good name for this yet) and telling him that it started a little while ago, with every man failing so far.
- At the gates to the first room of the trials the slave meets the queen for the first time.  She tells him a bit more about the competition and then makes him drink some of her vaginal fluids, giving him even more erotic energy. 
There are 4 trials he has to complete:
Trial 1:  The slave simply has to reach the door at the end of the room.  He isn't told this, however, until after he has inserted himself in the first succubi and finds that he can't pull out due to a great suction force.  The slave concludes that he has to cum in her with a load massive enough to force her vagina open, and eventually does so
Trial 2:  Red and Blue are in the next room and the slave is tasked with making them both cum.  The twist, though, is that he's bound by their elastic bra straps and can barely move (I'll give detailed references as to how he's bound later).  He manages to get semen on both their breasts, though, and rubs it in with what few parts of his body he can move, causing them to cum from his cum's topical effects, as seen in chapter 2, which has only gotten stronger now.
Trial 3: The next room has a massive harem of succubi who swarm the slave.  He's expected to make all of them cum, but things are seeming bleak as the chapter ends with him buried under a pile of them.
 
Chapter 7
Cover: Not sure yet
- The chapter opens with a greater succubi and some of her assistants capturing an entire village full of men.  The men are initially standing in a crowd, naked, erect, and compliant (due to pheromones) as the succubus explains their new role in life.  Their wives, daughters, etc. have all been drugged and are fast asleep. 
- She then has the men form lines based on their penis sizes, the least of which are being turned into squigglies as the others walk single-file into one of a couple of large cages (on wagons or something).
-  While that is happening an angelic woman appears and tells the succubi that they've gone too far this time.
Meanwhile, back in the dungeon, the slave is still undergoing the third trial.  It seems like he's taken a bit more control of the situation, but is still a bit desperate and is starting to get exhausted.  He does eventually prevail, though, and is pleased to find a rang to clean himself (the succubi in the last room kissed him a lot) and some of that pink fluid to help regain some strength. 
- ^ At some point during this trial Pink and Purple can be seen watching from the audience and sucking off some squigglies as a snack.
Trial 4: The last room merely contains the queen sitting on her throne.  The slave has to make it to the end of the room and simply touch her, but this proves difficult as the queen's incredibly powerful pheromones and blown kisses make it difficult to move or do much of anything without having massive orgasms.  By the end he barely manages to crawl over to her and touch her foot, but it counts.
- The queen applies a glossy golden lipstick and kisses the head of the slave's penis with it.  This lipstick permanently "supercharges" the slave with erotic energy, making his penis grow a bit, his testicles expand more as his sperm cells become larger, and making him much more virile all around.  The queen asks him to fuck her right there and he's now able to despite having no energy left before. 
- That angel appears in the dungeon and says she's banishing all of them back to their own dimension.  Red and Blue attack her but she's able to effortlessly immobilize them  and cast them into a portal.  She then sends out a magic wave that turns all the squigglies back into humans, including the hero, who Pink was coincidentally sucking on.
- Knowing that the angel is far too powerful for any of them, the queen tells her succubi to retreat and they all go back to their own dimension.  Pink and Purple seem determined to find their way back to the human world again one day, though, and have the slave to themselves (not knowing where he'll end up).
- As the slaves and former squigglies are all trying to find clothes and leave the dungeon the angel notices the golden kissmark on the slave and takes note of his "assets."  She asks him if he'd like to join her in their world and he finds himself unable to refuse as he's completely infatuated with her. 
- The hero wonders how much of a choice his former apprentice really had in the matter and the comic ends with the slave ejaculating on a bunch of angels as the one from before explains that their magical abilities are also cum-based, but they don't have to live off it like the succubi.  The slave notices that not a whole lot has changed, but the angles are much gentler with him.
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Looks like the forum messed up some formatting, but I think it's all still readable?  I just feel weird about throwing the word file up somewhere before it's all finished.
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PostSubject: Re: Comic Commissions of Mine   Comic Commissions of Mine - Page 2 EmptyFri Jun 21, 2013 7:02 pm

sounds incredible. and it reads fine for me
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